Comments : Thoughts... go away!

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    Amazing Mattie, just amazing !!

    I will back for a more detailed comment in a bit.

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    Ooh Matt, what do we have here??
    Amazing, super sad, perfect flow, excellent choice of words.

    Love, hate, miss, forget,
    so many feelings inside,
    I try to curl up in the corner,
    from the world, I try to hide.
    ^^
    I love how you stated all the different emotions in the beginning, it prepares the reader to understand how it all started.

    I want to say I don't love you,
    but deep down I know it's not true,
    I wish I could totally forget you,
    but I'm reminded of you with everything I do.
    ^^
    Your heart say something, and your mind goes with something else, now even looking at yourself reminds you of her cause you used to stand as two, now you are left alone so you see something missing in the picture.

    Though you are miles away from me,
    still deep down I wonder how you are,
    are you enjoying your life today?
    do you still wish on every shooting star?
    ^^
    When you truly love someone, even if they leave you or live a hundred miles away, you will always think of them, maybe not all day long but at some certain times they cross your mind so you wonder how are they right now? Is life treating them well?

    Frustrated, mad, upset, hurt,
    these feelings I feel towards myself,
    I scream for anyone to hear,
    but no one seems to come help.
    ^^
    Now all the negative feelings come out, but unfortunately no one seems to hear your cries.

    I'm frustrated at this simple mistake,
    acting before I even gave it much thought,
    now I sit here waiting for the day,
    that I will finally get through this drought.
    ^^
    Sometimes spontaneous actions can lead to something else, I totally understand those lines.

    Mad at my stupidity, upset at my mistake,
    my mind is wandering way too fast,
    I can't seem to fall asleep again tonight,
    how long will this pain last?
    ^^
    Self blame will never solve a thing, so stand up and try to mend what was broken, maybe by then the pain you feel is eased.

    I will wake up again tomorrow
    and put another smile on my face,
    even though deep down I'm hurting,
    wishing for life's forgiving embrace...
    ^^
    First two lines describes me alot, in most of the time. I always try to hide my pain by smiling and trying to laugh, when deep inside I would be crying.

    5/5 my friend, and as always ... Just keep smiling :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Amazing an emotion great another top poem from Mattie :D ur a really great poet and I love to read ur poems cuz their always filled with so much and always great,,a very wonderful job I love love loved it :) 5/5