This is an amazing write! I love "you can't kill an idea" - however it almost seems as though this poem belongs in a Sad or Dark category with the morbid themes throughout. I enjoyed the simplicity of the writing style, the short stanza's executed your message very well. There's good flow here too. Well written.
This poem echoes a revolutionary's voice (Egyptian) seeking true liberation (democracy), from suppression, first by a dictator and now his henchmen (military). The 2-line stanza's carry the hidden sentiments very well. The poem seethes through your mind, and stands out because of the strength in the desire to breakthrough oppression.
Oh don't you color my voice with colors of ivy
imprisoning me in my own room
I interpret it as ...don't you suppress my voice ...colors of ivy could be interpreted 2 ways: as a poison, or as the bright red colors of the Boston ivy (fall color Ivy), with red depicting blood as in more bloodshed. Imprisoning me in my own room.....depicts stifling in some form, in one's own home=country.
The ensuing stanzas depict the intense anguish that builds within, with the desire to be free ...to be liberated from tyranny spanning decades.
Very well portrayed throughout.
The ending stanzas powerfully portray a revolutionary's thoughts and strengthening voice:
An amazing write.
You said so much in each line that the reader could completely relate too.
Strong wording, full of passionate, and emotional value.
6 years ago
I really enjoyed this piece from you. It's a very strong poem with a strong message and yet you have managed to get it across without it been too ''in your face'. I think this is because it had a melodic rhyme to it....like rap perhaps? Anyway, as I said, very enjoyable.
Wow, this poem is amazing! I love it from start to finish... I must say I imagined this poem as a song! I was thinking of how it would sound if you sang it, and I think it would be a pretty awesome song, maybe you could try singing it and see what happens!
I really liked the title, and loved the repetition of "You color my voice with colors of ivy
Imprisoning me in my own room" I think it adds so much meaning to the poem. You did a great job with this poem, and your poems always have passion and meaning to them =)