Comments : There comes a time

  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    That first stanza just kills me. So many people are going to relate to this whole piece, but the first stanza is something that will hit home as it did for me. I love the way you described everything in such detail, such imagery.

    I also like the little bit of rhyme you had going on. I think the flow of this poem was really good, but the rhyme just 'made' it for me.

    I love the message of the silver lining here. You start out with so much pain, so much sadness, and turn it around to a 'learn to dance in the rain' sort of ending. I thought this was one of your strongest poems I've read in a while, just has me captivated...!! Love it!

  • 5 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I loved this Yak, great work, the opening was good, but your second stanza, I just keep going back to reread it lol I think this would sound nice spoken.

  • 5 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Kudos to you for this poem, a 5/5 indeed, keep on writting, and I'll keep reading

  • 5 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Kudos to you for this poem, a 5/5 indeed, keep on writting, and I'll keep reading

  • 5 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    I love this poem!!!!!!!

    You penned a really good piece here.

    Faultless and well worded

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Yaki,

    I already told you how much I loved that poem and really I can't say much more than that. The words spoke to me in so many ways and you truly have a way with your words. You know, I know often you're consumed by your emotions but it's amazing what comes from them, this piece is just yet another example of how beautiful these emotions can be when you use them to your advantage.

    yet,
    even for the darkest moments
    there's a fancy coffin awaiting,
    the only thing known to be permanent
    are tattoos...perhaps,
    for after a heart has melted into
    its last beat,
    they too rot away with all
    the lust-kissed flesh..

    I usually only pick out certain phrases or lines of poems that I adore but this stanza, something about it I kept reading over and over again. I liked the idea of the tattoo's rotting away, it's true they're said to be permanent but once the body decomposes they too will fade, a nice metaphor here for heartbreak and the imprints people leave upon your skin.

    A beautiful poem as always, I loved the inspirational message at the end of the poem. Too many of us out there needed to heart it.

    -Mel.

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    All I can say is I loved it fantastic wording and it's amazingly written :) 5/5