This well written dark poem has hit its dark mark 5/5 I am none the less happy the author is still alive
5 years ago
A beautifully sad poem.
However, I found that I enjoying the poem more at the beginning then the end.
Regardless though it was a grand and powerful read filled with deep emotions.
Sometimes that I'm sure many people can relate to.
I enjoyed your diction and the flow was great as well.
I believe the third stanza to be my favourite.
Well done keep writing such emotional though provoking pieces.
There is a rawness in this poem and darkness can be felt with each line
I read three ways in this poem that may have been referring to the way this person killed themselves. First there was the mention of a knife cutting deeper. Then there was a mentionof the neck popping so an image of someone hanging came to mind
Then there was the mention of the pills- overdoseI thought of. I don't know if that was an intentional thing in your poem but it was how I read it
Suicide is a very sad issue and I hope that this poem does not reflect your true feelings
I agree completely that this is a raw piece. It's like the reader is entering your deepest thoughts and this thought that you are holding nothing back since you've lost so much. But you are truly beautiful.....these haunting images do pierce the mind but don't let them stop your heart. Well-written with some strong emotions that grasp and make the reader hold onto that awful sadness.
Darkly darkly..wonderful write. maybe its my own cynical taste. i simply loved this. if these are your true feelings then i am sorry you feel that way. but on another note the sheer insanity of this poem, the longing and suffering was wonderful. my favorite so far!
5 years ago
by Silent Girl
Very good poem i can relate to this poem because i used ot cut myself i feel the pain and hurt from this poem a lot very touching sad really deep :(
I like this poem a lot Hailey. Though it is really sad but it is filled with your hearts emotion. The feelings of death are there from the start. You show you want to die right away and it's sad though I know this is true. I love the knife in your skin though. It shows a lot of dark imagery. Yes it is a sin for suicide but sometimes it's hard not to have these feelings.I like how you say the demons eat at your soul. The demons could be represented as depression or sadness. You are growing more and more numb which makes you feel cold.
Life is very difficult and I understand why you need to get out. The pain is sometimes so overwhelming you can't do anything about it. You say you are going to hell but it seems in reality you are already there. Blood has frozen in your veins and there is nothing you can do. You want to scream but its all on the inside. You want to have a good life but it's ending here. We are all beauty inside and it's hard to see though. You are beautiful and strong. I know you have overcome so much from this poem. You eant to be done with this pain and that is great. 5/5