Comments : Day Dreaming (acrostics)

  • 5 years ago

    by Sylvia

    As usual, the love is very clear in your words. The love is almost tangible to the reader. Your significant other is a lucky person indeed. Well done again Meena.

  • 5 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Love is abundant in this piece, written with simplicity but powerful in wording and emotion. Excellent Meena

  • 5 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    Rousing, passionate, rare piece of imagination from a soul who has much love still for her loved one.

  • 5 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Great poem, great imagery and well written.

  • 5 years ago

    by Jad

    Meena, this poem was deep in love and it is very clear to see your passion and desire and wants hidden in the lines as you write from your heart. I liked how you wrote the poem into an acrostic. Made the poem even more poetic but I feel as if it made the flow disrubt a bit but I still really enjoyed the poem. The imagery your poem conveys is very realistic and you produce many different ideas and images into the readers head as they read it. I also noticed that there was some rhyming in the poem, which I really liked and I found it a good part of the poem.

    "Distance vanishes between us every time
    As we meet in this special place of mine
    You and I explore all sides of passion as we"
    ^^^

    This stanza was really touching as many can feel the love and also memories of when they are with the one they love and can finally spend time with them. Your emotions run deep and come dripping off the page.

    All in all, this poem was special and incredible. I am glad to see that your poetry is becoming better every time and that you are using your skills as a writer to portray what your heart feels. Great job and keep writing!

  • 5 years ago

    by Exostosis

    The theme in the piece is common, but your personal touch makes it an exception.

    Distance vanishes between us every time

    ^ The opening is very strong. It compels the reader to want to read further.

    Glittering sand and Tunes of rains, these references I find to be very creative.

    Very well written.

  • 5 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    A beautiful piece brimming with love and desires.

    /Dance under the golden moonlight with glee,
    Rousing a fire of wishes hidden from reality and
    Embracing this pleasure we roll on glittering sand,
    All night long we unveil our desire and dreams
    // i loved the imagery here.
    There's a rhythem to this write , loved the smooth flow of words and images.

    //Gentle lover of my heart, you're the one I daydream about

    // that is so sweet :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Oh I love this beautiful acrostic..... very elegant and such a romantic piece.... very very pretty~

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    Meena, Meena

    I love your pieces.Fabulous!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Great lines~

    Molding a portrait of love that hisses with steam,
    In my mind this moment plays over and over again
    Never ceases as we romance to the tunes of the rain
    Gentle lover of my heart, you're the one I daydream about

    Good job! 5/5!

    Cheers,
    Ray

  • 5 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Lovely Meena, An Excellent Acrostic!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by christopher

    Another great description of love and the art of making love on a glittering beach of sand. written through the theme of a daydream and one moment in time you will never forget. the only word i would have a problem in this poem is the word "hiss"; otherwise the poem is good. can you tell me why you used the word hiss and the meaning for using this word.