Comments : Life

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Interesting poem! I love the description of the newborn, and how it first discovers life, and then how you continued to describe childhood and old age.. it was a nice poem about life... but a bit melancholic at the end.

    The final stanza was so strong yet sad:

    Old age creeps as a thief in the night
    Death as our enemy we'll lose the fight
    Life goes as if dust in the wind
    It quickly fades and comes to an end

    >> I like the idea of old age creeps as a thief in the night, that was a really clever quote!!
    I wrote about how time is a thief in my poem White Noise, so for some reason I remembered it when I read this part.

    Great job!

  • 12 years ago

    by tainted melody

    Awesome job girlie...it was beautiful:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Moonlit Candles

    This was a really neat poem I would say. This is so true how life just passes by us in a blink of an eye. We have to make the most of what we have i front of us. Nice write. :)