Comments : Dreamers Rose-Collab with TJ BECKER Arizona Eagle

  • 5 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    This was a learning experience for me. You're so talented that you made writing this fun and easy. Thank you so much for accepting my offer to collab. :-)

  • 5 years ago

    by Lioness

    Well this is a lovely collaboration.

    Such beautiful images. Reading it made me go into a relaxed state of mind for about a minute then I realised I was at work and it went away lol
    So I read your poem again ;)

    I love the last stanza - Waltzing clouds unite with the stars. I think of clouds that are moving and they open up the sky and the stars can be seen.

    Gorgeous!!!

    Well done to the both of you

    x

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    My gosh, what is there to say about this terrific piece. I mean I love this, the descriptions and images are beautiful and the word choice is magnificent. This piece shows how wonderfully you two write together. Stunning piece, 5/5 of course.

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    My gosh, what is there to say about this terrific piece. I mean I love this, the descriptions and images are beautiful and the word choice is magnificent. This piece shows how wonderfully you two write together. Stunning piece, 5/5 of course.

  • 5 years ago

    by James Pike

    Very descriptive and thought provoking. Excellent collaboration work. I can't tell which verse is who's (and I know maple tree's words pretty good LOL)

  • 5 years ago

    by Ellie Kate

    I felt as though this poem should have rhymed while reading it. Not that it was bad without it, but the type of flow you produced together made it seem with the rhythm that it would be a rhyming poem, and I was surprised that the tone and rhythm was so flawless between two people. I don't know either of your styles so I truly cannot pick which stanza is related to which writer. The nature images are strong and a definite beauty.

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    This collab was great! The first stanza was incredible and has got me really anticipating summer now!

    two word choices I seriously LOVED:

    wafting through majestic willow trees
    on a breeze of silent longing

    ^ Wafting was a word I've never read in a poem, it was so refreshing to read a new word and it made these two lines so strong.

    and

    Waltzing clouds unite with stars

    ^ that was just incredible. The use of waltzing was seriously my favorite part of this entire piece. Beautifully described poem you guys I think you two did a great, descriptive job here!

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    This is great and fantastic imagery,, u two did a terrific job I loved it,, its kinda like a silent secret love,,a great poem 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by ronel mccarthy

    What is left to say ? -majestic !

  • 5 years ago

    by Jenni

    Absolutely beautiful poem, I like your choice of words and the images you paint. I couldn't make out which part has been written by who.

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    Alright :)
    such a joyous piece.. It's enchanting and full of harmony and melodies.

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    Fireflies dance in the light of the moon
    a delicate Terpsichore of grace and beauty
    celebrating the romantic splendor
    of natures seductive images

    ----This one is my favorite stanza.

  • Beautifully written; you both have an amazingly talent that works perfectly together that was impressively flawless.

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 5 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Collabs are really special. Though they might sound simple but are actually very tough. Merging words, thoughts and creating one special image which keep running on reader's mind all the way...i find it tough and at the same time...interesting.

    Loved the way you both got it perfect.

    all the best and take care

  • 5 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    What a lovely collab!

    I think the title was picked well as it beautiful and invites the reader in. It does what a title is meant to do and that is to draw the reader to the poem.

    I think the poem is good in length and each stanza flows nicely from one to other and its hard to tell this is a collab because everything just sits together so well.

    What I love most about this poem is how you and Maple Tree painted such a beautiful picture in my mind.

    I have to agree with Lebonese Phoenix that this piece is enchanting.

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    I mean:
    "What I love most about this poem is how you and TJ painted such a beautiful picture in my mind." *

  • 5 years ago

    by Lifeless Doll

    Candles flicker in dark of night
    swirling visions captivate my thoughts
    running away to summertime dreams
    where dragonfly's sing a melodic tune.

    - Summertime dreams and dragonfly's fit so well in this stanza to me, the imagery and description of this is wonderful, great stanza.

    While the fragrance of devotion peak
    celestial songs of unbridled temptation
    wafting through majestic willow trees
    on a breeze of silent longing

    - Another beautiful stanza, flawless not much more to say about it

    Fireflies dance in the light of the moon
    a delicate Terpsichore of grace and beauty
    celebrating the romantic splendor
    of natures seductive images

    - Nature is so well described in this poem, trough wonderful words like dancing fireflies :)

    Waltzing clouds unite with stars
    organic shadow lovers smile
    crickets whisper in silent serenity
    soft whispers sigh in silence
    dreamers orchestrate a summer rose kiss.

    - And a beautiful ending for an amazing poem, the last sentence left me in awe, great job overal :)