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Awareness is shortcut to cure. We needn't die in Silence @ all. Nicely shared. Keep tweeting!

First, I want you to correct the end of line three. Second, you don't need the </3 on line eight. Third, eliminate the 'sad face, ;(' on the last line.

Now, I like the fact that you are trying to communicate your mood to your reader, but the way you write it makes it seem as if you're struggling. The strength of the poem is kind of weak. It makes the poem sound as if you really don't want the reader to know how deep your anguish is. Therefore, here are some suggestions for you:

Use "Shush" instead of..."Shhhhh".

So, it should go something like this...

"Shush. Listen, do or can you hear? (
not 'don't' or 'can't')

So the first part should be like this:

Shush. Do you hear?

I'm crying, but my tears are silent.
I'm crying, deep inside to hide my pains from you.
I'm crying, for me; for you.
And if you listen, you might hear my silent tears.
("I cry for the times I can't" is confusing. So I would scrap it off)

Then the second part...

I cry within to hide my broken heart from you.
And now I hate living life because of you.
So shush and listen!

Do you hear,
The tears that have been drowning me,
The endless tears I cry;
The pain, digging into my heart and killing me slowly?

I would follow through with either, "Do you hear?" just like I've did or "Can you hear?"

I hope this helps makes your poem stronger, and maybe you could use this suggestions to make better subsequent poems.

P.S: If I were to choose a title for this, I'd call it..."Silent Tears"

Sad touching end, nice write, I like the beginning, middle, and ending...

Amazing is the only word this needs

I like it =]

I got goosebumps when i read it...have gone through this phase...its very heart breaking

I Love it this is how I've been feeling all week you put it down perfectly.

I Love it this is how I've been feeling all week you put it down perfectly.

I love the way you penned this piece. I feel the pain and I like how you stress the point about the tears being unseen, silent tears are the most painful ones. Favorite lines...

"I cry within to hide my broken heart from you. And now I hate living life because of you. So shush and listen!"

I love it...Great job.

Love it really touching

Wow i could so relate to this poem. i liked it alot. i like multiple of your poems that i have read of yours :) feel free to comment on any of mine or add me to your favs :D

It was really good and so emoional. you could really tell that you've been in pain

Good job, nice flow(to me atleast) sounds like it'd be a good song if it was ever made into that.

Ok, so this describes exactly how I feel all the time. I love it. <3

Really good as is everything by you girl :) 5/5

Beautiful :') I cried when I read this. 5/5 for sure.

I love this you know that your reading a good piece when you feel tears rolling down your face.

Very well written. I can feel your emotions like your screaming it at me. 5/5

Awwww dont cry! your too beautiful to cry!

this is uh may zing :D love it :]]

5/5