Comments : Exceed Limitations

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Just a minor thing on this line,...
    'My hearts beating fast'..you have forget an apostrophe on hearts...as in heart's..

    I found this poem to be well written. You kept up the good flow and amazed me with your brilliant choice of words and your knowledge of them. Beautifully written.

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    WEll written with an excellent flow. I liked the wording and the ease of each line.

  • 12 years ago

    by Joy Helberg

    I love it keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    I will say that I can so relate to this poem

    My emotions flow within
    they are intense and tingle
    throughout my body
    bringing anxiety
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    It doesn't take much for our thoughts to really affect our body. We can think of one simple thing and our anxiety can kick in. It does for me.

    My heart's beating fast
    so much life to last
    but can't control
    what's eating at my soul
    and pleading to my heart
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    This is a very powerful stanza. Part of anxiety for me is when my heart starts to beat really fast and my breathing gets heavy. I have to take a couple of deep breaths to try to calm down. I love how you have said there is so much to life but you can't control what you are feeling and why. Awesome stanza

    Feelings that linger and stir
    feeding into thoughts of old
    creating more to hold
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    This for me means our thoughts from the past sometimes it is hard to let go. Our old thoughts and feelings can create new ones but that just means there is double the amount rather than just some.

    I think this one may be your strongest poem now that I have seen. Brilliant

    Something I can really relate to

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