OMG ! I hope more people read this poem. This was awesome. I loveeedd the analogy here!! Comparing ones heart to a clock, very unique, nothing I've really ever read before!..

The last line I think really tells the sadness thats in this poem.. Using "Tool" was just a great choice and it ended the poem for me making me say "oh my gosh I want to help this person"...No one wants their heart like that!

One last thing, my favorite part was there is oil in your veins than blood. That was very creative. Loved it!

Wow I totally agree with Chelsey. This piece is magnificent and well expressed. The emotions are clear, the descriptions are not only interesting but also vivid in one sense or another. Remarkable piece.

I really love this. Especially
"I am but a slave,
to love's labor pains."
Everyone has something they cannot escape and that's kind of what I get from this. Love is the chains that bind my wrist.

"See when they built me,
they forgot my final piece.
Its the heart I lack"

This is probably my favorite line. I sense more of a terminology of that there is a heart, it's just so broken by this point that it is as if it does not exist.

Just what I read from it lol ^_^

I lvd d whole idea..fulpoints..

This poem was amazing!!! What a frigid feeling though...I almost don't know what to say. I really liked the metaphors you used in this. Whoever had you before...seems like they messed you up pretty badly...
Hmm...Guarded much? I find this so true, though. Unfortunately.

But every clockwork heart I find,
is flawed from anothers fight.

For when smiles and looks,
are just lies and hooks...

:(
Anyways, you're a great writer! You must keep writing!

5/5

This was A..mazinggggg!!! I loved it u'r such an incredible writer I'm now looking forward to read more of ur poems.. my favorite line is probably:
"I am but a slave,
to love's labor pains."
this was truly meaningful:) 5/5

I love this :)

I really liked it, 4/5

Deep and emotional work, really enjoyed reading it. Beautifully expressed feelings! Great one keep it up ^^