Comments : Speechless...

  • 5 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Stanza 1
    ..There is a thing about this girl that just makes you love her more and more each day. It could be the little things she does but that makes you happy, keeping a smile on your face. She has your undivided attention because the love you share is true. Great way to start off this amazing piece.

    Stanza 2
    Then you go on to describe her beauty like that of the angels signifying that she is nothing like a girl from this earth. She is everything to you, the thing you cant live without and your thoughts are always of her coz she is always on your mind. Well written here.

    Stanza 3
    I really liked the second line in this stanza. Just shows how she can calm you down, how she can make you feel wanted and happy. And you end this stanza by assuring her that your love is unconditional and that it will live on always and forever.

    Stanza 4
    You lack the confidence and the right words to portray how you really feel,. They say you always admit more to other people how you really feel about someone while you are shy to admit it to them.

    Stanza 5
    Now you are brainstorming, trying to figure out ways to convey your feelings. The assurance you give in this last stanza is amazing. It is exactly what a poem like this really needs. 5

  • Aww, that's a really sweet poem. It really conveys a lot of sweet, true and beautiful emotions that you're trying so hard to express, but you just can't seem to express to the girl that you care about. One of the loveliest poems I've read in a while, Cupcake.

    5/5

    -Shining Star (:

  • 5 years ago

    by Dark Shadows

    This one is so different from the last one.Full of hope and love.

    Loved it.

  • 5 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I know the feeling, hope it's real and hope it last.

    You penned a touching and sweet write. It's what everyone wants in life. I thought you wrote from the heart making it even better ..excellent

  • 5 years ago

    by Meme

    And speechless I am after reading this. I agree with TJ, its what people want in life, but some never get the chance to find it.
    Your love poems are one of my favorites, you know sometimes I can read my feelings through your poems and that just makes me smile :)

    Loved it Mattie :P

  • 5 years ago

    by Lifeless Doll

    Very sweet poem, your words are lovely :)