Bliss,
this is one of the most beautifully yet erotic poems I believe I've ever read.

You kept your words so classy, so intriguing I'd say that I dont know how your readers couldn't feel the love between these two people. Very creative comparisons, your ending was incredible!
Chels

What for sexy ..... is this?!!

I'll edit this soon with a longer comment,
for now just know. I love this.

So far,

I have only seen two pieces of poetry
that have make (at least to me)
something so how to say it,I don't wanna use sexual..something so.. soo sooo soo I don't know.

But, I mean...you know what I mean,
lets call it something so private can we?
with these two I mean "unknown destination" by temps, and now this one by you.

Talk about elegance,
how do you ladies do it? does this happen when you're over 18 -_-'?

because seriously I can't.

"for I ride his cosmos
to utopia"

you know whats funny,
that there is this movie by barbie.. that has to do with Utopia ( okay,I admit I watched it)
and in the movie the scenery is so damn magical, and beautiful..all these sparkles and stuff, I know you probably didn't write this poem based on that but ya know?.... ya know.

it took me there...

I don't really have much to say,
I just wanna give you props for taking a topic
many would fine you know..a little bit spicy..
and dip it in such elegance and grace.

you know how I always say your diction is what I love the most,
you always have some uncommon words going on,sometimes I have to look them up and when I do, I come back to re-read and I enjoy it even more.

so you're basically expanding my vocabulary.

also noticed you seem to have a fondness for "linger"....

but the way you bring it forward, its always perfect and different in every piece.

this I like, this I like, This I love.

you erotic superstar.