Cataclysmic Silence

by Meme   Feb 9, 2012


Here you are standing
right in front of me; yet I
cant reach you. There is
something holding me back
from taking that one final
step, but I cant see it.

I might be blinded by my
own calamitous thoughts,
but I clearly hear the raindrops
falling on the ground, so why
cant I listen to what you say?

Choking on my own words;
I stood there disenabled, but you
were fluently speaking the most
powerful language ever known
-Silence.

What are you trying to tell me
with your invisible words?
You magnetized my breath for
a split of a second then you
released me. I gasp; to realize
I only miss you when I'm breathing.

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© Copyright 2012 by: gIrL
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  • 11 years ago

    by Nema

    Whooo okay this IS a good one it has to be one of your favorites :)

    I loved the last two stanzas, okay I really think you should write a book full of poems about words and silence. Great write love =)

    Shine on~

  • 12 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    We must ultimately be confounded by the inability of words to express true emotions. Words are for thoughts; we use them as poor stand-ins for the things that grab us by the guts and move us profoundly.

    Here you have captured both the failing of words and the power of non-verbal communication in your encounter.

    "why cant I listen to what you say"
    Indeed, your refusal to accept the message unspoken is the heart of the issue, for when you recognize the power of silence on his part, you also feel the harsh impact you sought to avoid.
    He "magnetized [your] breath" meaning he polarized you with his quiet demeanor which nonetheless exuded raw emotional power, unseen, yet inescapable.

    You have mastered the complete simile, using a single metaphor and developing it throughout the poem. Consistent and complex. Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachit Bhanage

    Hmm...that was intense !
    the insomnia u hold__really,appericiated !
    Effective !

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow!! This poem is amazingggg!!! First, the title was great, I love your use of the word "cataclysmic" (I had to look it up to be sure of the definition lol).

    I really loved it, not just the way you wrote this, but also the topic... I really believe silence is so powerful, it can be more powerful than words. Someone can say sooooo much with their silence... and I love how you wrote about this. It really affected me because I understood what you were trying to convey.

    Love this stanza:

    "Choking with my own words;
    I stood there disenabled, but you
    were fluently speaking the most
    powerful language ever known
    -Silence."

    >>> silence really is the most powerful language!!

    This poem was brilliant! Great job hon!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    What I was wondering about was, how did you come up with this idea of using 'Silence' to convey the simplest of message 'Missing You'. I'm speechless as to what words to best use to compliment this exquisite piece. Very hypnotic. You're an ace poet Meme, ;-) Mashallah!!!