Comments : Marie (Rictameter)

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Awesome poem done in a tricky format..Super job *bravo* :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Oh my God.. Andrea, that's beautiful.
    You told us about her, and now I see something inspired by her. It's really touching..

  • 12 years ago

    by Bridges

    *Hand-To-Heart-Gesture* This is so so sad. :( My heart must've fallen twenty feet...
    Poor Marie...
    This was such an elegant poem though, Maple. Absolutely Beautiful. Short with Impact. I loved it!

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Thanks for the information. Indeed its a tricky form and you did it reallly well.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    It's actually the first time I see this form and to be honest as cruel as this may sounds, it fits to the context so much. I know this might now have been intended and I'll explain what I mean when I say cruel right now. You're refering to her dying and the form of the poem emphasized it too, somewhat because it made me think of "ashes to ashes, dust to dust" since you end up using the same two syllables at the beginning as at the end. I am sorry for that coming to my mind.

    What I like so much about this poem is the fact, that you first mentioned her name and then her beauty because that underlines how much she means to you. It doesn't only show how good hearted you are, but also how special Marie is. Furthermore I could feel how much it hurt you to see that she has to experienced being abandoned.

    Overall this is a very touching poem.

  • 12 years ago

    by Angie

    One of my favorite forms to pen and you nailed it!

    This is a very touching write, brings tears to my eyes and sadness to my heart yet a happy ending when Marie gets to be with her Tony once again.

    Alzheimer's is such a hard disease for family and friends to deal with, my own mom has it and its so hard, I put on that brave smile with her when on the phone or in person, but once I'm alone it just tears me up.

    You penned a beautiful piece here Andrea...

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    OMG thats really sad:(
    I really love this poem, its the 1st time for me to read Rictameter and even hear abt it:) great 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Xionide

    It's been a long time since I read a poem of yours Andrea, still as refreshing as ever.

    "In a scattered mind, hear her cry
    Laced fingers reaching out, slowly falling "

    you always were able to word things so perfectly and the imagery these two lines create all by itself is outstanding.

    "Her love calls to her each morning
    A light only she sees
    "time to come home"
    Marie"

    such sadness for an ending, but its one that works, I really like this poem, it stands for what sadness actually is in a poem.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Oh how sad is this.

    It reminds me of my grandmother who has the same condition and it is heartbreaking.

    Well done with the formed poetry as well hun.

    Great job

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    A well deserved tribute.Beautiful piece.