This is a great message. Might I say that your writing is rather rhythmic, too. I have been reading through a book of great Irish poems, and I can see that you keep the tradition alive.

-tips hat-

This is so sweet, very touching

I enjoyed this , your writing is different, you have your own style that I really like reading. But this was a tender and love filled write. Excellent

I liked your poem a lot. It is beautiful and it has a superb message.

This poem is so good to be true. Very thought provoking and entailing emphatic details. Your words are straight from the heart, giving it a realistic polish. An educative message to children. You used poetic writing to advise the juvenile exuberance of a child. There's no better medium than composing this fantastic piece. Lovely I must add, I'm running out of words already. Stay blessed, KUDOS!

Christopher-

what a powerful message.... Inspirational and very heart warming poem for your daughters....well done~

Crawl before you walk
little ones.
Babble before you talk.
Life will be a mystery
Neither to be endured
Or become injured.

^This is a good opening, for you tell your daughters to enjoy every little step in life rather then growing up too fast and yes along the way, they will learn that life is indeed a mystery.

Listen to your heart,
not your head,

^ :)We all have gone through this stage with the wars between our heart and head.

Follow your intuition;
and not for fruition.
Be not proud,
Or to loud.

^Good advice here..at times it is always good to follow what our intuition says and been too proud always sees us to our downfall.

Love will be bitter sweet.
Heartbreak you will meet...

^So true..so true and when we see our children go through this..it really hurts the parents.

Soothsayers with fork tongues
Promising all delights.

^I love these lines! It says to be aware of all the evil in this world who will trick any vulnerable person.

Harden not your hearts,
Be not profane.
Look into mirror
not for vain.

^Another stanza I like! It says to be humble without been mean and cold hearted and to always take a look at yourself before we belittle another person. I like this message!

Guard your integrity
with serinity
never loose femininity.

^The most important golden rule for any girl! There are predators out there to do anything to cheat girls and that is the most scariest thing.

Overall I love this poem for it shows the concern of a father for his girls and talking about the ways of the world without been harsh..enjoyed the read :)

Love the idea of a father guiding /giving good advise on good values to prepare them for life .I enjoyed this write :)

A beautiful and very inspiring message for a daughter. Each line is filled with warm and meaningful words that every child must learn. Very well written.

Loved your flow and the message you were sending out in this poem to your daugthers.

5/5

That is really wise advice, did she bother to read it twice, or send you packing, because of all she thinks you're lacking?

Just kidding you:) I felt like making a rhyming comment.

I am not sure how old your daughter is, but I do know most dads go from superhero to superdork effortlessly when a daughter becomes a teen (in her eyes). When you wait long enough, the superhero phase returns, lol.

Nice work on the poem, children are a blessing!

Be not proud,
Or to loud.

^^
or too loud

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

I agree with the above comments.. The part that got my attention the most was the following.

"Harden not your hearts,
Be not profane.
Look into mirror
not for vain."

I really like this one because there are times when it's really hard to follow them. My favorite line out of the whole piece is harden not your hearts. Be compassionate that's what I can understand from it.

Great piece, with an interesting content about the values that we should have.

Christopher: your wonderful poem struck my heart. I have two daughters. Your poem has given me hope that there are good fathers--and good poets still around in the world.--Tim

Christopher: your wonderful poem struck my heart. I have two daughters. Your poem has given me hope that there are good fathers--and good poets still around in the world.--Tim

Do not like, too much stressed rhyme.