Very nice acrostic. I find a lot of the acrostics are just words, and not really in sync or make a whole lot of sense when put together. But you nailed it with perfection. Very enjoyable read

Well....my first comment was saying that I think you should edit out the 3 'that'words that you had used but...I'm glad you have noticed them yourself and done some editing. It flows so much better now!

I really liked the image you portrayed here...holding your breath awaiting the return of this person you miss...somehow it made my tone chance to a whisper as I found myself holding my own breath....very clever of you.

A short poem but...you made your point very clear so...very well done!

Elegant acrostic...flowing with deep and heartfelt emotions... the last few lines left me silent and thinking....very touching piece~

I really love this :)

Such a lovely use of words to portray feelings regards to missing a close friend, family or lover.

It's enchanting and beautiful, smooth flow and heart touching piece.

Mashallah, Jazakallahu, Khairan. Very exquisite dear lily. Much love, hugs, Cheers! :-}

You captured love beautifully in the focus of breathing which brings the awareness of life .........almost meditative........

Wow, I love this poem! It was simple, sweet, and full of emotions. I really like how you played with 'breath' and I love the idea of sharing a breath with this person, and how you forgot how to breathe...

I really enjoyed it. This poem is filled with meaning and nostalgia... I love it!!

Great poem sweetie :)

It's the first time I read an acrostic, and I feel that it isn't forced.

It ended so fast.... that means I really adored this write.

Very beautiful, sad and poetic!

Lovely poem.

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Simply beautiful, open and pure :-) x

Nice poem

Acrostic poetry is an art. and i love acrostic poetry. specially when they are panned very well. as this poem is written.. good work...