Comments : Waiting Game

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    True, it doesn't matter how long it takes as long as there is love from both sides. I like the tone and the message in your poem.

  • 5 years ago

    by UndeadGrace

    Dang good stuff bro
    It like I was reading my thoughts

  • 5 years ago

    by Amreen

    Good poem...good start...good flow....messaged conveyed to the right....!!

    He see's it in her eyes,
    that she have been hurt before in the past,
    Her heart has felt the touch of love,
    but never did it last

    ^^
    good verse

    Moments go by and she starts to think,
    maybe this is the one,
    But whenever her heart starts to feel love,
    All she does is Run

    ^^
    my favorite verse

    Waiting for someone special just shows,
    how special it can really be,

    ^^
    my favorite and true enough...:)

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    My gosh this is an amazing piece, simple but it is very well written and very descriptive... 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Randy East

    Second line "have" should be "has"

    I really like your poem here, you show a lot of talent in your writing. some lines are a bit to long for m taste and through the rhythm off just a bit, you might consider cutting some syllables out of them. example are... line 2... and the first line in the last stanza.

    other then than its ace! 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by DirgeVenustas

    This was really sweet. very true i suppose. nice job

  • 5 years ago

    by Wafaa

    I like this poem very much:) so true... good job!

  • 5 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    I love this poem :))!
    Going into my favorites.

    This is how alot of girls are, im this way now bcuz of getting hurt. So many people can relate to this poem.

    Every single word shows a girl that its okay to be hurt and to be scared. That no matter how long it takes you will find someone amazing, someone who wont hurt you.

    love it :)
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Angel

    Wow this explains life for many girl i love it :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Wow speechless !!!!

    This was such an amazging poem that many girls life is like this(: I can relate to it love just beatiful(:

    5/5 from Mee x

  • 5 years ago

    by Lifeless Doll

    How beautiful :) great poem

  • 5 years ago

    by Janna Antal

    Loved it!

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    --I like the poem and it is so relatable for some people who been hurt before...and frustrated in the means of love. Yet, it not easy to open your heart again and to welcome love into you heart because of the past that you anticipate some way you will be hurt when you love again...

    "He's everything she's wanted,
    but she just cant seem to let him in,
    Because her hearts been hurt before,
    and she promised herself never again"

    --Well, this part tells that the girl withdraws herself and constrain her heart not to in love again. I like the ideas here.

    Just take some time and listen,
    See where you need to start,
    Time and Patience is what it takes,
    to mend a broken heart,

    --Yeah, I agree in this part when you trying to let that person loves you... you must have patience and time to wait it until the wound of her heart heal..."it takes time to mend a broken heart" love this line...

    No matter how many months or years it takes,
    1,2 or even 3,
    Waiting for someone special just shows,
    how special it can really be,

    --Well, the ending part is good, too. I really enjoy reading this. Keep writing more:))
    5/5
    ~C

  • 5 years ago

    by Thomas

    Nice poem, good rhythm.

    Only downside was the grammatical error at the start (have should be has)
    This messed the rhythm up a little but still a good poem.
    Keep it up!

    4/5