Benevolent keeper of the flame

by Daisy if you do   Mar 7, 2012


Wrapped thick,
in putrid stench
rotting under
scorching suns;
remnants of
my brothers bones
fully gnawed of marrow

stained lips pursing,
mumbling, cursing
as though not a soul
could hear
trickling ink
flowing profusely
like waterfalls
from broken tips to paper

roadblocks which
to stumble on
laden with
burnt offerings
that lie upon
crumbling altars
where hate resides
and pillars
point fingers
reflecting back
at self righteous
hypocrites

Kings
sing songs
of narrow minded fools
with half baked brains
completely vain
of intercourse,
the art of making
love not war
is lost among
the premature
ejaculation of words.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    Kay*

    We've talked about this poem in depth personally, and I don't want to carry over the true meaning here, as I feel it is personal and better left unsaid. :)

    As a writer:

    "stained lips pursing,
    mumbling, cursing
    as though not a soul
    could hear
    trickling ink
    flowing profusely
    like waterfalls
    from broken tips to paper"

    this stanza stood out most to me, as people often hide behind their words. Whether they hide their feelings/emotions, or think they are better than someone through their words, bringing condescending 'tones' through similar pieces... this piece just hit home. Being victimized through poetry makes me giggle in a way.

    I like the playful way "stained lips pursing,
    mumbling, cursing" in particular plays off my tongue, it's playful but disdainful at the same time. Gives me mixed emotions, being fun to say but feeling so dark and doom/gloom.

    Your last stanza is another favorite of mine, poetically speaking your soft/subtle rhyme is another reason it's a "fun" read. Then you hit me with ABSOLUTE giggle fits with the very end, I couldn't help it. So often people jump to conclusions when reading poetry. I always get messages saying "why are you saying x?" I'm like WHAT? People shouldn't be confused by their OWN personal interpretation. That's the beauty of poetry, we take what we want from it. :)

    Awesome snarkiness ;)

  • 12 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Very very good. I really like this piece and am very glad to have come in tonight just thinking I might fine a good poem and found a really great one instead. keep up the good works - look forward to reading more..

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    "the art of making
    love not war
    is lost among
    the premature
    ejaculation of words"

    BEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASTLY.

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