Honestly saying: I tremendously loved the way the first two stanzas are written. They are so strong and so pace-measured.

But then, the last two stanzas... it's not that they aren't good, but they dimmed the singe of the first two, if you know what I mean.

I hope you'd consider editing the last two, maybe change some words... I don't know.

But the overall view: I love the idea, and the molding scene at first. Bravo Jen :)

The end of an era, a friendship dissolving is such a tragedy. But instead of being the same diversity is what makes a relationship exciting.

Good job

This was a really nice piece.. and surprising i didn't think it would be a sad poem , maybe i should have been warned by the title, yeah? lol but anyways, it's very sad poem. . . . i know what it feels like to have long friendships end. . its terrible, you feel like you lose piece of yourself..

but remember at the end of each era, another begins :)

good poem :) and I like everylastings poems too :) nice mention lol

I love the first stanza, awesome.

The image of cookies reminds me of something sweet. So you want him to be sweet just like you. I love it

Awesome write hun. I love the title as well. I think it fits the poem and what you're trying to say

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I wish that I could change you,
Mold you into what I want you to be
Take the cookie cutter approach and
shape you until you are the same as me
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this opening stanza as amazing, its my fav too. I like how u used the cookie cutter, it made me feel that u really want him to be like u:)

Great poem, I really enjoyed it:)

Stunning piece. The first stanza is superb.Bravo!

This really hit home for me. It's been almost a year since me and my ex best friend haven't been friends and this kinda hit me in the face, lol. It's a brilliant write as always and seemed to have an aire of acceptance. It's true, we're all our own person and we should be able to be who we want to be and do what we want to do. I don't understand why people try to change us or stand in our way.. or make it hard. Whatever the situation may be with you both, I hope you're ok. Lovely write : )

Dani
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This is really nice jen, every stanza is so unique, and all the passion you have for poetry really shines through :)

I wish that I could change you,
Mold you into what I want you to be
Take the cookie cutter approach and
shape you until you are the same as me

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Flawless opening stanza! I can sense a feeling of longing - like without changing this person, you will inevitably split. It's really sad, but we are who we are and they are who they are and we have to accept each other for what we are. I LOVED the 'cookie cutter approach' statement. Awesome!

I would have loved to break you,
Tear you down to my size,
Put us in the same boat
And look through with the same pair of eyes

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I get the sense of frustration here - perhaps because you haven't succeeded in changing this person. I just have one critique here: the last line seems too long, puts the flow out of sync. I think if you remove the 'with the' it would help. Your choice.

Yet we shall never agree
You will always be you
And I will always be me

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I love this stanza. It shows an (unwilling) acceptance. This part of the poem is quite fast paced.. however it doesn't ruin the flow it just makes it more intriguing and adds to the emotional expression of the piece.

The differences between us couldn't be more clear
And I watch the bond between us fade until it disappears
Giving rise to the end of our era.

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A superb ending to the piece. I have a feeling that 'disappears' is the wrong tense, but I'm not sure... You seem to be writing in past tense prior to this though.
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OVERALL;
I love this piece. I love how it is so relatable and speaks so much truth. I love the emotion behind each word and the meaning behind the whole poem.

Your title was definitely suitable - it didn't leave much to the imagination, but I liked that it was straight to the point: readers knew what they were getting with this piece.

I just love the whole thing! 5/5

**Adding to my favourites!! (: