Fabulous, MaryAnne. It's an awesomely fears-provoking piece. You made me ponder... and such pieces are cherished by me deeply.

I try to hide my eyes somehow
from the streams of sunshine,

^ One can get shivers, by only reading these two lines. It's like saying sunshine doesn't suit me.

...darkness. It's more than
a mood, or a piece of clothing,

^ wow. I love how you described darkness. It's not a regular mood (maybe referring to teenage constantly changing moods). It's neither a piece of clothing: this description is brilliant. If it's a piece of clothing, then you would easily pull it off from your body. But it's more than that... darkness lives within you. Love that.

why can't I desire to stay
where the sunshine lasts all day?

^ The rhyming here is simple, yet in this simplicity, sadness persists.

all the while I wonder if this world
could ever be my world too.

^ Oh MaryAnne, that is definitely melodic, yet in a frustrating note. We may all ask ourselves that same question..

- I love how you said 'black tears' also.

I'd rather it rain, just for now,
so I could freely walk in the street
and know this is my life-
and someday there will be change coming.

^ freaking awesome... freaking heartbreaking.

I only suggest that you change the very last line to:

and someday there will be a change.

^ Read this loud with what is preceded by, and see how the sound would be prettier.

---- amazing write, MaryAnne.

This poem is captivating.
The uncertainity to this world we live in, and if we really truly belong here.

I love the topic, I hope you write more of this
5/5
-X

Awesome free write :] i try to hide how im feeling sometimes but it never seems to work :/ i really love the style of your writing :] Great job!