If cigarettes could talk... I guess they would bit**-laugh at smokers.
I question, how long
would it take before
your thoughts are
exposed, and the
betrayal sinks in
to someone else's
lips from their
^ Beautiful piece, portraying reality... Thanks Liz for bringing this crisis forward through your beautiful poetry.
5 years ago
by Tara Kay
Liz, Just when I am turning in for the night, you post this piece and get me thinking all over again...
That's what I love so much about your poems, they are full of pondering thoughts, not to mention such striking imagery and intense emotion...
I like this piece mainly for it's message for I am against smoking and this is one of those subjects that gets touchy but is a strong one and a very important one
I loved everything about this. When i read this, i was thinking what if that cigarette i smoke every friday really spilt every little secret of mine and i concluded that i wouldnt trust the lil guy no matter what.
I hate the smoke and I don't smoke either. Loved your poem.
5 years ago
by Ronel McCarthy
I love the imagery .......charcoal breath........minds of a chimney.......sensory words to bring the message across -the poet's dislike for smoking ..............and the deeper level-the things we do and why we do it.
The title really cought my eye. I have never heard anything like this poem and i thought it was very original and sent a great message. We can't let something as harmful as that, control our life :) I would love it if you could check out some of my new writes. I would love to hear what u think :)
I LOVED THIS POEM, ONE OF MY ALL TIME FAVORITES, I HATE SEEING PEOPLE SMOKE AND IT KILLS ME INSIDE EVERYWHERE I GO, EVERYTIME I SEE A CIGARETTE WITH SOMEONE I FEEL A DAGGER RUN THROUGH ME, IT'S NICE TO KNOW OTHER PEOPLE ARE AWARE OF IT'S DAMAGE, AMAZING POEM.
I WISH THEY WERE BAND
The title is really appealing and I liked how you didn't put a question mark after it because at first glance it seems like a question but I like it more as a statement. Your poem was nicely drizzled with alliteration that didn't overpower the message. It was just right. My favorite part of this poem was the structure. It sets up a nice pace and rhythm when reading it which adds to the overall joy of reading. Your word choice was exquisite because it related to smoking but was weaved in a poetic manner into the piece. It made for some nice imagery throughout the poem. I also liked your use of personification like "minds of a chimney" because it added a more relatable atmosphere to your words. Overall this was a wonderful piece that had me thinking of what cigarettes would say about the people smoking them for they do hold many secrets.
Tie Breaker's comment, will be added as soon as it's received.
IF YOU DON'T CARE ABOUT YOURSELVES, THEN GO AHEAD AND SMOKE BUT AWAY FROM US! BECAUSE WE WANT TO LIVE IN GOOD HEALTH! AND OH HOW AWESOME IT WOULD BE IF YOU ALL GATHER AND DWELL IN A WORLD OF YOUR OWN! GOOOOOOSH.
Sorry, had to say this. My ex-boyfriend used to smoke tons of cigarettes a day and I was sick of it. I tried so hard to let him quit smoking but all in vain! Anyway, I wish him all the best now, hahaha. I truly like your poem, I found it original and new! Keep writing, lovely.