Comments : Horror in an Angels eyes

  • 6 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Ohhhh TJ- My mouthed just dropped.... I love this!!!! The message of an angel... and what harbored within her eyes is so captivating... but the sorrow and terror....and how it affected others... just really drew me in...well done~

  • 6 years ago

    by Decayed

    Mass murders, war, racial discord reigned blood
    Starving babies, disease destruction of our planet
    She showed me all the hate in a godless world
    Looking away, she released me from this horror

    ^ I like this a lot, TJ. very captivating read!

  • 6 years ago

    by Jump from Life

    This is so intense and amazing I couldn't look away! Incredible to the extreme and left me speechless! Your wording and the way it flows it magnificent! I truly love this poem! Amazingly flawless! 1000/1000 <3

  • 6 years ago

    by L

    " Immediately my lungs gasp for precious air
    Heart feebly tried to continue beating
    Terror as I have never known gripped me
    One look and my soul became a prisoner"

    This one is my favorite part. I like the description and how you describe how your soul became a prisoner from just one look.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Captivating poem, I loved it:)

  • 6 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This was such an alluring poem TJ, I had to read it aloud since it flowed so beautifully, and the descriptions are really haunting....how the weapons, starvation, evils, and misfortunes of the world can torment someone. Amazing work, I seriously enjoyed this new one!

  • 6 years ago

    by Lioness

    Wow TJ,

    This poem is awesome. I love the words you used and the sadness of this poem really drew me in. I thought man this woman must be going through something and to offer her a hand in need was sweet.
    When you described what you saw in her eyes it blew me away. The pain and horror. The images you portrayed were so descriptive and shocking. I loved the way you did this.

    It is sad what is currently going on in this world. It is amazing how it effects everyone. This woman, she, her eyes beautiful though what she is seeing in the world is not.

    I love this poem TJ.

    x

  • 6 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    This is a really powerful story, TJ. I remember this one, it makes you feel uneasy....

    I once knew a girl, who seemed to have the weight of the world on her shoulders and everyone she met talked about the look in her eyes...She survived one of the most tragic accidents on our town and was in ICU for a really long time. Whe she got out she was 10 centimeters shorter (about three inches, I think) and her back was no longer straigth and she had a scar that ran all across her belly and she would never have kids...and her husband left her. This poem reminds me of her.

    Well done,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 6 years ago

    by Jennah Bella

    TJ,
    This is amazing from start to end. I loved how the poem was jam packed with feeling and how you described the pain you seen the womens eyes. Consider this nominated :D

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Hi TJ

    I don't hope you have to many nightmares, or this kind of persons running around in Arizona.
    This is a hell of story, really good work, solid from line one to last dot.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ronel McCarthy

    You condensed so much in this poem.......substance /strong emotion . Lovely TJ

  • 6 years ago

    by Exostosis

    This is a new dimension to your work bro. The author witnessing the world via an angelic entity, that has in turn witnessed the dark side of the world, is a very creative approach to poetry.

    Very well written.

  • 6 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow this is great,,imagery is awesome and amazingly worded and written,,something new I've never seen you write before,,it's good and so much emotion erupting,,it's somewhat heartbreaking 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Angel

    Wow this is really really good i could see everything that was happening while i was reading this. this is the best use of imagery that i've seen here. 5/5 :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Moonlit Candles

    Wow this was a poerful poem. Really neat.

    With her back to me a woman sat alone
    Around her an aura of sadness and pain
    Feeling that I should lend comfort, I approached
    Reaching out touching her shoulder

    You could really feel the pain in this stanza. The aura as your described all around the angel. Nice job.

    Immediately my lungs gasp for precious air
    Heart feebly tried to continue beating
    Terror as I have never known gripped me
    One look and my soul became a prisoner

    This really was neat. I liked the way you described this part. I could really see the imagery used here as you touched the angel's shoulder.

    Resplendent eyes pulled me in like a whirlpool
    Wrenched by waves of melancholic emotions
    Trembling I stared deep into the bowels of hell
    Events of unimaginable magnitude flashed before me

    How this scares you with all the world events taking place. It is a shocking thing when you really think about it.

    Mass murders, war, racial discord reigned blood
    Starving babies, disease destruction of our planet
    She showed me all the hate in a godless world
    Looking away, she released me from this horror

    And of course some of the events you described here. It almost does seem like a godless world. such questions as people asking "why?" But we know the satan is in control.

    Sobbing my body slumped weakly to the floor
    Lamenting the death and suffering, she had shown me
    This angel harbored the sorrows of the world
    In the most glorious eyes of the color spectrum

    This ending really caught my attention. Cause all the sorrow and pain was harbored up inside the angel. so you could really see why the angel was so sad and in pain. All in all a great job. :)