Ohhhh TJ- My mouthed just dropped.... I love this!!!! The message of an angel... and what harbored within her eyes is so captivating... but the sorrow and terror....and how it affected others... just really drew me in...well done~
7 years ago
Mass murders, war, racial discord reigned blood
Starving babies, disease destruction of our planet
She showed me all the hate in a godless world
Looking away, she released me from this horror
This is so intense and amazing I couldn't look away! Incredible to the extreme and left me speechless! Your wording and the way it flows it magnificent! I truly love this poem! Amazingly flawless! 1000/1000 <3
7 years ago
" Immediately my lungs gasp for precious air
Heart feebly tried to continue beating
Terror as I have never known gripped me
One look and my soul became a prisoner"
This one is my favorite part. I like the description and how you describe how your soul became a prisoner from just one look.
This was such an alluring poem TJ, I had to read it aloud since it flowed so beautifully, and the descriptions are really haunting....how the weapons, starvation, evils, and misfortunes of the world can torment someone. Amazing work, I seriously enjoyed this new one!
This poem is awesome. I love the words you used and the sadness of this poem really drew me in. I thought man this woman must be going through something and to offer her a hand in need was sweet.
When you described what you saw in her eyes it blew me away. The pain and horror. The images you portrayed were so descriptive and shocking. I loved the way you did this.
It is sad what is currently going on in this world. It is amazing how it effects everyone. This woman, she, her eyes beautiful though what she is seeing in the world is not.
This is a really powerful story, TJ. I remember this one, it makes you feel uneasy....
I once knew a girl, who seemed to have the weight of the world on her shoulders and everyone she met talked about the look in her eyes...She survived one of the most tragic accidents on our town and was in ICU for a really long time. Whe she got out she was 10 centimeters shorter (about three inches, I think) and her back was no longer straigth and she had a scar that ran all across her belly and she would never have kids...and her husband left her. This poem reminds me of her.