Whisking Wishes.

by Blissful   Mar 28, 2012


I catch a meteor
and craft my wishes
into each crevice

As I fling it
once more
into the abyss
I hope it carries
the love
I have fought
to hide

For I was never very good
at stringing dreams
into your heart

I call on the cosmos
for my rescue
to kiss the lips
that have craved me
yet I lacked the courage
to just let go

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  • 4 years ago

    by Silent Scribbler

    Simple but brilliant! I loved it! Great work! 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I liked the way you write your poems :) They
    are simple yet each line/word carries an image
    that sticks to the mind.

    I catch a meteor
    and craft my wishes
    into each crevice

    ^This opening stanza sets the mood for the
    reader and the emotions..like this part!

    As I fling it
    once more
    into the abyss
    I hope it carries
    the love
    I have fought
    to hide

    ^Yeah I like the thought here of catching a meteor and flinging it back just to see what it
    would bring back a second time..such a tender feeling this stanza holds.

    I call on the cosmos
    for my rescue
    to kiss the lips
    that have craved me
    yet I lacked the courage
    to just let go

    ^This ending makes the reader sigh as well as
    make the reader feel the yearning love the writer holds..lovely piece :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I am really liking this piece, you have a way with words, such simpleness but the metaphors and creativity really forms the perfect poem.

    I love the use of meteor's, and how you wrote about crafting things because life is a craft, each day we have to make new things and just keep ourselves going.
    Letting go is hard but sometimes it is the only option.

    Great piece
    love
    xx

  • 5 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Blissy,*

    The idea of catching a meteor is something really different, It created a lot of different imagery. Was it a mini meteor? How did you catch it? Was it a large meteor and was this a symbol of strength you have on this topic you're speaking about. I liked the use of the term "craft" it's a nice once, you can craft in so many different ways so again I began to question how did you craft this? You left some ideas open to the audience which is always really good, we can create our own stories from it.

    Flinging the meteor again reminds me of that strength of getting rid of something, casting it away for whatever reason you may have. In this case you're trying to get rid of those feelings, the ones you've carried with you for so long. Something I can relate to.

    I think the ending was my favourite part, the idea of lacking courage to let go, that line hit me. I interpreted this line in two ways, the first being as you wanted to, the fact of letting go to kiss someone or be with someone or rather to let go and be without them completely.

    Another lovely piece!
    -Mel

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