Comments : Golden Memories

  • 11 years ago

    by Moonlit Candles

    I really
    liked it. Your use of imagery was done very well. With your
    first stanza: I really liked this. Time can tell so many stories
    it's amazing. And of course creeates new ones too. 2nd stanza: This was great. You have sad and then happy
    times. Every moment is different from time to time. 3rd and last stanza: I really liked this part. Especially
    incorporating the hourglass was really cool. I could really
    imagine that grain of sand dropping. Great job. :) p.s. a little typo nist to mist. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by White Orchid

    Ok thanks for letting me know that typo error. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awww this poem is so sweet <3 I really enjoyed it! I love the meaning behind this poem, and it was a joy to read.

    "I relive every moment with you
    Ready to create more memories soon"
    >> I love this part, and the idea of reliving and creating new memories with someone special.

    The ending was perfect - and the rhyme scheme made the poem flow well!

    Great job! <3

    Just a suggestion:

    I think you meant 'leaf' instead of 'leave' in the second line?

    I really enjoyed it :)

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    I enjoyed reading this piece, specially the last stanza. The flow on that one was the best.

  • 11 years ago

    by William Mae

    Really a good write, memories are a link to our past and await us in our future.

    Very good

  • 11 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This was a great idea to go with this contest title...My favorite line was " the hourglass drops another grain of sand " That line helped the reader to visualize how time just slips away :)