Comments : Even a Crooked Smile Shines.

  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    Ohh Bliss. How beautiful. I will be back to comment better later.

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Beautiful!!!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    OH MY GOD I AM SPEECHLESS.

    This was short, sweet, meaningful and reminded me of my ex. He'd always say so. I love this, Bliss, I totally do. Will be back later to edit my comment, and nominated.

    I loveeeeee this!

  • 5 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    So few yet so much..wonderful

  • 5 years ago

    by Moonlit Candles

    This was great. I loved the way you constructed this poem together. Starting with:

    I wish I could
    tie strings
    to the corners
    of your mouth
    and elevate them
    with balloons
    filled with my love

    This was so neat. I could really see the emotion here. Your feeling of sadness wanting that person to smile.

    I have longed
    for your smile
    and lost mine
    along the way

    I thought this was a great ending. So much was said in this poem longing for that person to be happy again. All in all a great write. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Congratulations, well deserved win :-)

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    This one is great!

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Please...visit my accounts and leave comments..tnx

  • 5 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This was so creative and pretty...good job :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Xionide

    This is really elegant, totally genius way of writing about a smile. hats off to you dear girl, this is worthy of front page winning.

  • 5 years ago

    by Akerele1 Segun22

    Wow! I love it so much. My powerful comrade,could you pls read my poems and leave comments.Thanks.

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Okay...

    I promised to come back but dammit, I am such a wishy-washy girl who has finals and is dying to have a bit of time for herself!

    I am just here to tell you, Bliss, that this didn't leave my mind at all. I still wonder how you could, with few simple words, move me! You just wrote it perfectly.

    I love the selfless tone throughout your piece. How you prefer their happiness to yours. That's just reminded me what love really is 'bout.

    Great, great poem. And congratulations on your win. Very deserving. Keep writing for me to keep reading!

  • 5 years ago

    by Omar

    This is one of the greatest poem i have read. Great job.

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I'm going to sound like a broken record, but here goes my repetition... I LOVE SMALL POEMS that say so much!!! WOW on this elegant love gem!!!!!! Sorry folks but I had to scream within this comment, that's how much I adore this poem-
    Title: There is so much beauty within a smile and when I saw the title my heart melted- What a creative title- love it!!

    First stanza: What a unique and creative first stanza!! I actually visualized two balloons raising a person's smile and how the author ending this stanza "filled with my love" <----- so elegant, mixed with loving and creative flare- beautiful!!

    Second stanza- My heart broke- The love of a person and to what lengths they go too is heart gripping... The author took twelve words and designed an explosive ending...How the person longs to see the one she loves smile and in the end, losing hers as well...sighs...... touching piece-

    I can't say enough about this poem, and again when you read the poem, the title is so perfect.... This poem is sad, unique, and beautiful... a wonderful read, and one I will read many times in the future.. defiantly one of my favorite poems to date! Well done Blissful

  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    Comments from judging:

    This woman is full of short, meaningful love pieces that are so packed with meaning and emotion that it is absolutely astounding. Her imagery here made me smile, like a teenagers first love and the butterflies, hope and naivety you inevitable see (in the first stanza). Keeping with the theme I definitely am brought back to my childhood where there was this person I longed for and no matter what I did, I could not get their attention - this summed up my sophomore year in a much prettier way than the rugged emotions felt. After hearing Blissful from the readings I can always picture a softer, breathy tone while reading these poems. It adds depth, I believe, and is just beautiful.

  • 5 years ago

    by Katherine

    This is so great. I know I'm not as old as you but I know exactly how you feel. I'd do anything to make him smile even though he doesn't feel the same about me and it's tearing me down. I'm such an amateur and would love your critique on some of my poems, so if you ever find yourself with nothing to do feel free to check them out. Thank you.

  • 4 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Very Nicely Done!!!