Fleeing Path(Tanka)

Blazing mania of
stars, perish in winter spell,

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WOW! Such amazing imagery here.
I can just picture the stars being hidden by thick snow falling from the sky. Beautiful!

piling up the trails
treaded on, to seek for the

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I believe this is a 'syllable count' necessary poem - so I can understand this, but I don't think 'treaded' is a word - I think it may simply be 'tread' --I'm not definite though.
Great continuation from the first lines. (:

embed flame that ignites sparks.

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A brilliant ending - it kind of draws everything together:
*stars - like little 'sparks' of light in the sky
*winter - fire is needed for warmth
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OVERALL;
I really like this piece. Short but sweet and quite a depth for such a piece.
Beautiful word choice - a clear image was created throughout. Well done!

Stunning piece. 5/5

This is AMAZING! :)

Though am not that familiar with Tankas, this was amazing and beautiful, maybe i will try one myself, you are an inspiration.

Im starting to love Tankas and Haikus when I use to not! This made me love them more! Perfect Perfect words here darling!

Ohhhh this tanka is beautiful... I love the flow and wording....very nice Sister!!