Comments : Only Glancing

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Love every part of it. 5/5 Keep writing :)

    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Love every part of it. 5/5 Keep writing :)

    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Xionide

    "Come and take a look in my eyes
    Look past the image of you that you will see reflected
    In these seemingly still cobalt eyes.
    Look deep past the glassy stare.
    Behind these wretched blue eyes,
    You'll find a grotesque soul,
    Stumbling down the road to tragedy."

    damn, the metaphores here are top notch, this is heartbreak at its worst lol kinda like its gonna turn to bitter hatred at the drop of a needle, nice.

    "In her left hand she bears the weapon,
    She has used to wreak scars of the fragmented
    Across her once, fair, beautiful skin."

    kinda reminds me of self harm cutting. neevr worth defacing yourself over someone else, they should BE so lucky.

    "You'll find the damaged heart
    Belonging to the girl with the bottle
    Filled with all the empty promises,
    Mixed with false hopes of happiness
    Topped off with the taste of alcohol
    That fails to chase away the sight of his face.
    Standing on the outside only glancing."

    I've been there, trying to find solace at the bottom of a bottle, but it doesnt help does it lol, maybe for a while but its a thing that can't take away how we really feel because we eventually sober up lol. this is poem great, Im gonna nominate and favourite this.

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    "Look deep past the glassy stare.
    Behind these wretched blue eyes,"
    I love these lines xD its all good piece 5/5 keep on =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Daylight Lucidity

    Very beautiful :) I loved it