Comments : I am not God

  • 5 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Your poem touch me deeply, and that is for me the best symbol of a good poem sad og happy.

    I am pleased when you emphrase, you are not god...

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    It's so difficult to forgive and this poems shows it. You are not god and thus you won't forgive as easily as he does because that word is not found in your dictionary. I like that part the most. That is not found in a western dictionary. The point is clear and the flow smooth.

  • 5 years ago

    by Giegielove Goddess Poet

    Nice one! 5/5 for U!

  • 5 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I really love this piece, very very cool and a great topic :-) 5/5 xx

  • 5 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Wow I really liked this poem! and I loved the last two lines , it ended this deep pouring of emotions on why you cant forgive and i love the reference to the hurricane in this poem, like their mistake make your whole world shift and I totally get that....

    nice poem. keep it up!

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This poems is deep it was very touching

  • 5 years ago

    by Something Diabolical

    A very good poem!
    alot of deep emotion in here
    im sure everyone has felt guilt and found it hard to forgive somone.

    "To ask me to wipe clean our past,
    is like taking a Hurricane
    and putting her back in the ocean
    without any damage to Earth or its people."

    was my fav stanza.. i like how you described your inabilty to forgive somone.

    wording was great. you really do have a way with words!

    keep it up!
    5/5 from me

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    WWWWOAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWW!
    one of the best poems youve written..till this day, well one of my favs by you for me, at least !! a front page.

    amazing title.. great wording, damn...emotions.
    GIRL u moved me ..

  • 5 years ago

    by Cheyenne

    I love this poem :)
    Its all so true.

  • 5 years ago

    by Cheyenne

    I love this poem :)
    Its all so true.

  • 5 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    Oh. My. Gosh. I can so relate to this poem in this very moment. You have penned the exact words I've been looking to say. It is very beautiful and very touching. 5/5!!

  • 5 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    Beautiful :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Max

    "To ask me to wipe clean our past,
    is like taking a hurricane"
    I love these lines
    AMAZING poem so well written and gr8 emotions
    5\5 keep on =)

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Chelsey, don't bother caring about those people who ask for forgiveness every now and then, giving no damn about your feelings or about their awful sins. They deserve your resentment, that is if you have the heart to hate someone, I believe you're too kind to. <3 This poem meant to me, because so many times have I been in this area where I can't forgive nor forget. Nobody is perfect. We are not angels, we are humans, that's what we were made for, to have feelings, whether they be grudge, love or indifference! It's all so normal, don't feel bad about yourself for having emotions inside. No, on the contrary, be proud of them, for we, and with 'we' I mean SO many people, might envy you for having such a sensitive heart! :)

    Now enough babbling about humans psychical constitution, haha. I found so many thoughtful images in this write, I can't even figure out how or where to begin...your title made me so curious and although I intended to read some stuff by you, I was even more interested by the title. But when I read the poem, I disagreed, LOL. You might not be 'god' maybe a goddess, haha. :P Seriously, when someone begins their poem with the 'if' clause, I feel so tempted! I love to think about things and with your first sentence I did think of beautiful, sad things that got me to cry, Chelsey. I felt that softness, that soft forgiveness but at the same time your inability to forgive this person, it's like...the hurt is still newlyborn and your pride is not allowing you to let go of it...it's just a wonderful way to say how vulnerable you are, or anyone can be. Loved the use of 'ounce' there as well. It felt, at least to me, that this person is not really feeling guilty, but nevertheless, you would be ready to 'rinse' their guilt and conviction off their heart and mind if only you were able to, this left so much for my brain to think of. I truly relate to your words.

    'and for me, forgiveness is just a mere word
    in websters dictionary'

    It would be very fitting if you added a full stop or two at the end. How you used 'mere' in here is just smart. It's kind of belittling your feeling towards forgiveness. I just love this.
    I, however, disliked the 'to' as it's repeated (in the next line). I would use anything to avoid it. Like...maybe 'asking me to wipe, etc'? I don't know... I LOVED the image about the hurricane being taken out and put in an ocean without harming anyone. I so loved it. It symbolizes impossibility and I love impossibility put between the words, and the most interesting is that it was unepected. This poem felt to me more realistic than imaginary but with you using metaphors, it made it even more appealing. Kudos. I can't lie and say that I liked the usage of 'undoable' in the ending. It didn't feel poetic to me. Didn't feel like everything else in your poem, y'know! I think in the stanza before you explained that it's undoable, so why repeating the same idea and saying that it's undoable? Maybe you wanted to confirm the fact that it's impossible for you to forgive this person but again, it didn't feel necessary, rather a filler. I don't know, just what I felt. I, to be honest, really fell for the last two lines. They amazed me, literally, Chels. I just can't imagine how a girl who always throws confetti and popcorn on us in the club can feel sensitive in this deep heartbreaking way, haha. I just think happiness fits for you so much, never knew I'd be saddened this much by your words, which is a freakin' awesome thing!

    Always write, sweetie, because you master them!

  • 5 years ago

    by LoVerSLaND

    5/5 Beautiful and simple. Nd I love the wording.

  • 5 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    This poem touched me so much. it was so beautiful and i really enjoyed reading it! This was simply an amazing poem!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Veamm

    Greetings

    The fact that this poem came from your heart with your feelings mix in. Touched me. I can feel your place.

    Forgiving is not never been so easy. Especially if he/she broke your trust. I agree that we are just Humans. We have feelings. It is not easy to forget.

    Superb piece.
    Straight from the heart.

    Keep it up
    Definitely a 5 for me