Got to love it!
How that one person,
Can bring up all of your fears,
And drive you to tears.
I stand here shaking,
thinking about all of the plans we were making.
A sick feeling in my gut,
i really have no luck.
We were meant to be bestfriends,
Or was that all pretend?
you use to be so caring,
Now you are always glaring.
I miss all of the times we hung,
We had so much fun.
Those memories i cherish,
but are soon to be, forever perished.
Its been so long,
Since you have been gone.
What did i do wrong?
Do you still remember our song?
Am i the only one thinking this way?
I haven't got much left to say.
I dont know how much more of this i can take?
Please tell me this is all fake,
Before i awake.
I can hear your laugh in the distance,
Remembering your persistence.
Those fierce looking eyes,
Driven with lies.
That cute little nose,
More delicate then a rose.
The secrets we told,
Let the lies unfold.
the way we danced,
My feelings, you sensed.
The clothes you wore,
My fake smiles, you saw.
You showed me a different approach to life,
Instead of waiting for happiness to arrive.
To dance in the rain,
And ignore all of the pain.
Drink until you drop,
Or until the rage stops.
It was a way to keep sane,
With no one to blame.
But now its all gone,
It feels so wrong,
I dont know where i belong.
It just doesn't seem right,
For we were so much alike.
And to tell you the truth, i miss you.
I know somewhere within your heart, you do too.
This is a good poem, especially on the emotional I'm venting type of scale. It makes a point and it shows who you sort of are. As someone before said, this piece is relatable, and yes, it is. Great job. Nice piece. Word choice could have been stronger here and there, but otherwise great. I love how your voice stands out and really makes this piece yours.
4/5 cause its common and words are slightly bland.
Yuck, losing friends is a terrible thing to go through, I know the heart break. This poem I think would be better though if you vented. Dont focus so much on rhyming, take your anger and you sadness and just write...
Very relateable poem hun, we've all been through this