Wow.. this is intense, and so well-written. Again, the punctuation is placed where need be, making the whole piece alive and giving the imagery a kick.

"Falling, tremor down my spin."
spin--spine (?)

Overall a really amazing write. 5/5 :)

-X

I'm embracing this cold, into my inner core.
Numbing the senses, wanting nothing more.

imaginantion is wonderful gift

So, emotional...breathtaking! I like the way you worded it and the punctuation marks are great..they are placed perfectly that even the tone of every line goes smoothly. Great work:))
5/5
~C