Comments : Natures dance

  • 5 years ago

    by White Orchid

    I really liked this, how u described nature as being a melody, and how the different plants portray almost different personalities and how u described the wind as being a melody. Also, one side note Ithink it is spelled poisonous instead of poisenous. :) but other than that I thought it was perfect! And loved it!

  • 5 years ago

    by Moonlit Candles

    This was really neat. I loved how nature was compared to different types of dances. I thought that really made this poem come to life. All in all a great write. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Wow.. The rhymes were written with such ease, it flows like water. The imagery explodes right in front of the readers face and the word choice isn't so simple, but at the same time, not so complicated. Nicely done..

    -X

  • 5 years ago

    by Jenn

    I like the metaphors you created for nature in this piece.
    "But every dance needs a melody,
    so the wind whistles through each tree.
    Then to give this song a beat,
    the rhythmic thunder is unleashed."

    This is my favorite part, very good flow.
    A masterpiece for sure!
    Jenn

  • 5 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    I think it was creative and different. Like how u described nature.

  • 5 years ago

    by White Orchid

    So I just re read this one with midnight sky, and I loved it even more thand before! Lol. It dawned on me how creative it was to describe the trees like that especially the tango stanza it is a dance with sharp lines and you described a poisonous vine and it would be perfect in representing that. This was just very clever actually and does deserve to be nominated. Just wanted to tell ya just how much I loved it! Again.

    • 5 years ago

      by tainted melody

      Thanks...I really appreciated that comment...I really tried to step out of my comfort zone with this one and hopefully i succeeded!