Comments : Synaesthesia

  • 5 years ago

    by Max

    Well this is amazing poem i have one small thing
    in my opinion
    "that greets you every morning
    in the late month of March."
    if u put that greets to greeting would be better
    other than that this is totally awesome
    5/5 no doubt keep on good work =)

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    This is O_O incredible xanthe...

    I loved it, I mean the pace in Which is written, the flow that it has and the information that it shares, and the sad tone all throyght it. What else can I say?

    Edit: I'm speechless but I'll be back.

  • 5 years ago

    by Heavy

    You've managed to convince me
    that even if the planets don't align,
    everything's perfect.

    I loved this piece! I'm wondering if I'm understanding this right, I may be a little off, seeing which category this poem is under but I think that you found such a creative way of expressing the way you both had felt for eachother, this convinces me that the person who had adored you was a poet themselves too! It's really sad though, how everything changes...One day, someone could come into your world and make you feel ONTOP of it...and then the next...they're gone and you're left off feeling beneath it...Wondering about everything that was said, and if it were ever true :( This is quite a neat poem! Great work! :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Awesome piece Xanthe!!! Good luck in the contest.yes it is that good!
    Lostlove1~

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    And I'm back, But I'm still speechless of what to say about this piece. I found it to be extremely good. My favorite part

    "you've managed to convince me
    that even if the planets don't align,
    everything's perfect."

    and there was just a part where I'm not sure if it should be the word funny or sarcastic aside from that I was like this O_O when I was reading it. With my eyes open because I couldn't even close them.. . that's how much I like it.

  • 5 years ago

    by Veamm

    Greetings

    Wonderful topic.

    Thank you for opening a new knowledge for me. I don't even know this condition at all.

    you've managed to convince me
    that even if the planets don't align,
    everything's perfect.

    Powerful lines. Great meaning.

    Good write
    You're very creative.

    Keep it up
    5 for me

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    Gorgeous, gorgeous,gorgeous!

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Smelled = smelt

    An awesome write, will comment later!

  • 5 years ago

    by Something Diabolical

    Woaah! an amazing piece
    your use of meataphors was brilliant. i think it flowed beautifully and like how you created breaks with "-almost-"

    "And now, my words
    are no longer sweeter than honey,
    my voice doesn't smell like
    the Spring breeze and
    the numbers I write are
    as dull and colorless as this half-life you left me to live in"

    was my fav part.. what an interesting way to show that the feelings have died

    i really enjoyed reading this poem.. different, hav'nt seen anything like it on the site before... also i now know about Synaesthesia.. welldone for making me aware!

    Keep writing!
    5/5 from me

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    It's the first time I hear there is such a case.. And a big applaud for you because you taught me something new in this beautiful piece of Art.. way to go Xanthe :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Kumar kainth

    Well am not able to judge, but your lines are leaving emotional feelings on me,

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    To be honest, the title puzzled me once I read it and I had no idea where you were going with this. I was wondering if your title has anything to do with the content of your poem and in the end it turned out to be that it has lots of things but I was the ignorant blondie who couldn't destinguish, lol! I have to agree with Abed, I never heard of this condition and I am happy that I have finally known something useful, haha, so I guess your poem was a delight to read. I loved everything about it especially that it went simple, unlike the title, it made me so interested. I love the flow as well, I love how you capitalized the 'f' in 'Fall' maybe to refer to the season itself? I don't know but I'm sure you have some purpose and I respect that. I love the ending so damn much, the half life thing and the bit about Winter blowing the breeze and your amazing words smelling like honey image! Every part just seemed harmonic, so kuddos!

    I don't know if I nominated this but sure that it is nominated, and sure it will have votes in the next week, good luck and awesome write. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Excellent piece

  • 5 years ago

    by Jenn

    WOW! This is so creative, I'm in awe!
    This poem made perfect sense, for such a confusing metaphor. I applaud you! WOW again.

    5/5
    Jenn.

  • 5 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    Wow this is so crazy!

    "You used to tell me
    my words were sweeter
    than honey,
    that you could taste
    the saccharin
    that rolls off my tongue
    and flutters down upon the paper.
    My voice smelt
    like the Spring breeze"
    This part was so interesting the way you put it couldn't have been put any better. The imagery here is just wow.

    I loved the way you ended it by bringing the poem all together, loved it.
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    I'm in agreement with The Poetess about being puzzled about the poem. But my gosh it was beautiful. The way you describe them, I could imagine it with my senses, you have written a glorious piece here. :)
    5/5 and favorite.

  • 5 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    You have written so so beautifully.......
    i loved it!!!!!!!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Wow! Very excellent piece, Xanthe...as usual..you did a very fascinating poem..you made my skinned-hair shivered..really really great and amazing..I love the way you write this...
    >>my words
    are no longer sweeter than honey,
    my voice doesn't smell like
    the Spring breeze and
    the numbers I write are
    as dull and colorless as this half-life you left me to live in.

    My goodness..how can I imagine that living life with peculiar senses from others...They can smell sounds, taste words, see numbers as colours..?

    Well, you did a splendid poem again..
    you deserve to rate excellent
    5/5:D

  • 5 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    You used to tell me
    my words were sweeter
    than honey,
    that you could taste
    the saccharin
    that rolls off my tongue
    and flutters down upon the paper

    Really loved how you started it. You reminiscence on the words you were told by your love. The feeling are all so real in this piece.

    This poem is heartfelt in that your description of the feeling is really good and the imagery you use by comparing your voice to a summers breeze. This poem has creativity well expressed.

  • 5 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    You've managed to convince me
    that even if the planets don't align,
    everything's perfect.

    I really liked these lines,its creative. they stood out and I love the wording of this poem. it was deep and powerful , also meaningful ...and thanks for the explanation as well at the end, put it together, you've done a good job on this poem, I liked it all.

    5/5