I always like nature poems, those kinds that come out from reality and speak of something deep. Deeper than just describing nature. You might find it weird but I felt sadness in here. Images were put in here with that tint of melancholy that I rarely, or rather never, find it in nature poems. Beauty was there too but I cannot deny that sadness.
The bricks part really, really screamed out loud! The way you likened it to a tomb, where no warmth exists, is just profoud. You just reminded me of all those times I'd walk under the rain along Damascus old streets with blocks and bricks scattered everywhere. It looks like a mess but it, to me at least, feels nostalgic, warm and romantic. I don't know why.
'Amidst the ruin
The corner of a corrugated iron sheet juts out'
You. Are. Creative. I love this, Nicko. Love this.
6 years ago
You posted this not long after I left and it's irked me that, as forlorn as the letterbox, this poem has gone unnoticed...what a terrible shame!
The images you describe so well here remind me of a station (perhaps a sheep shearing place) that used to thrive but now lies forgotten. I loved the used of words such as scruffy and thwack...they had such earthy tones to them which seemed to fit very well in all that was going on here. You really are very good at describing a scene and adding depth to it as you go along....thoroughly enjoyed this one!
This poem is an abstract painting of my Grandfathers forgotten pasture.... I can't begin to express the feelings I got while reading this piece, its very detailed and descriptive.. You described in detail of what I see when I walk into the pasture..feeling the rusted old farm equipment that hasn't ran in years and years... Love this piece!
This is just exquisitely worded. It draws different emotions in one and has a gloomy tone radiating in it. I loved how you took 'letter box' as a catalyst to talk about deserted nature is sadly wonderful. You excel at capturing the readers attention to the moment at hand. Making one ride along with you as if one envisions the same thoughts you felt when penning this refreshingly exuberating end product.
Even with the sad elements it has an air of serenity in it that immerses one into its presence. A well thought out piece. A masterpiece! *claps*
4 years ago
by Burning Angel
The imagery displayed in this poem made it easier to read and really get into! I love it mm
4 years ago
The scene is set so well within this poem and I can imagine myself standing in the place very clearly, well done. Lovely piece.
1 year ago
by Ben Pickard
I have to be honest and say I haven't read too much of your work, but upon reaching the end of this piece, I can only say how sorry I am not to have stumbled across your poetry sooner. I suppose you don't post too often so I never think to read your work, but I saw you online and thought I'd have a browse.
I didn't have to go any further down the list than one or two to find this gem - the kind of free verse and descriptive writing I wish I were more accomplished with. This is truly a wonderful piece of writing.