I really like this for its inspirational and uplifting message. The beginning-- seems like it was written with ease, but as I read on, it became a little shaky..
"And with wind that gust so full,"
---gust=gusts
"One that consist of love;"
--- 'one' is life, right? And life is singular, so 'consist' should be consists. If the subject is singular, the verb must be plural and vice versa.
"I'll be proving you wrong and give others
like me a shove."
---giving others like you a shove?? from what I've read and understood, the persona/speaker had a past which was hard, and she was like the underdog or something. If you 'shove' others like you, then you'd be the bully. Let me advice you not to sacrifice meaning just so you could rhyme. It really puts off the whole piece.
"Because once your little wings take you
away,//the decisions, the choices, they will be made,// And some of us will make some mistakes."
---I honestly don't make sense of these lines. I really like this piece, it has some treasures in between, and I'd like to understand it, but there are parts where you just want it to rhyme and there's no meaning. A little revision and this will be better.
"Where I can feel the warmth of its beams
onto my face,"
---onto=upon
"Life can easily pass by,
but what is the point of life if you just live in
a bunch of lies?"
---I don't think this is a strong ending. I'd rather you remove this part, so the previous ones would be the ending. A question in the end sometimes gives your piece an advantage, but sometimes it just weakens the poem. I don't know how you tied in the 'lies' part, so it's quite unnecessary..
I didn't mean to offend or anything. Just wanted to share my thoughts, and perhaps advice, if you found this helpful. Overall, I still like it.
-X

Hmm once more Xanthe got all the important points in the write
I can say this is pretty good
I like it
its true that we only take what we give
its the mean of equal value
but thats not the point
gr8 write and good word choice
the flow was hard for me in some parts but overall its good
Well Done keep on =)

Well done

I thought this piece was inspirational and well written. . the only problem is how u started the poem with "and" but maybe that was me but overall this poem was refreshing to read...

flyyy :D 5/5 from me

"
And when I'm standing on top of the shivery mountain steeps from above,
I'll be proving you wrong and give others like me an early opportunity to fly like a dove.
Because once your little wings take you away,
Your decisions and choices, they will be made;
Some of us will make some mistakes.
But we all must-
Take in what we can take,
Give what we can give,
And learn what we can learn in life.
We all must live;
It's your decision to live happily.
You can not let life gust by so rapidly.
Just let your wings grow,
Let the winds steady surge take you away;
Just go with the flow"

That stanza is so, so inspirational. Such a strong message you have portrayed here. Thank you for writing this. :)

I don't like flying that's one of my fear's i'm scared of heights :)

This was a very inspiring write, I can tell you grew probably grew a lot from writing this poem, it shows how head strong you are and confident as well, You can tackle any thing in life. 5/5

Intriguing creative write, and i like the use of words you chose within the poem, great job :)