Oh God!! Noura, this is beautifully bittersweet. Now it definitely is my turn to regret using up all my votes :(
The metaphors are perfect, the imagery. Everything is perfect about this piece. I hope someone nominates this, if not, I will next week.
Hope all is well
Very deep, sad and heartbreaking. It brought back memories of when I was a child
6 years ago
Wow this is amazing
so deep,the imagery and metaphors were amazing totally
the words flowed in magical way(no kidding)
it was so smooth and i enjoyed reading this full of emotion piece
"If only, rain, if only
you could realize what
an orphan would feel once
there are merely 36 stars
in the sky and the wind is
choked with pollens..."
love this start a lot
and the ending was fancy too
but that was expected from a talented writer such as your self
5/5 keep writing =)
6 years ago
I didn't imagine it would turn out to be about your dad... I love it a lot.
6 years ago
Never in my life will I understand your ability to mix such beauty inside of pain, to make such a faboulous poem. I too was surprised the subject was your daddy. Awesome write poetess. :) Just like you!
Oh this poem is so heartbreaking and filled with such sadness I felt everything. It is really hard when someone close to you or at least should be close to you does not treat you the way you deserve. Father's are supposed to protect their kids.
I am sorry that this is something you needed to write
You made me cry noura with this poem... It seemed as if you put in all the existing emotions into this piece... You have made this so descriptive and covered all the seasons and the metaphors are amazingly put in... I know its hard dear and your state reflects so well here... Im speechless and this is one of the most emotional piece I read on PnQ...
Stay strong hun....
This is beautifully sad. The pain it radiates is magnificently portrayed through your heart felt emotions. Your metaphors are so unique and how you compared the analogy of rain into this whole piece is amazing. Its really an unfortunate plight that you felt this way, thus composing this. Perhaps you've been nursing this feeling for a while now. How sad you've missed out on those tender moments. When you ought to have spent the better part of your growing period with your Dad. All you can ask and think of are just questions conform to your memories and needs. I wish i can imagine how you feel for i don't know. However, i do know its such a terrible feeling that knows no limits. You need to persevere and strengthen your faith relentlessly. No amount of questions can you find answered satisfactorily.
All you need now is to gather all the peace of mind you need to move on. That'll surely assure him a befitting assurance of how much well you're coping. Day in, day out you'll have alot of reasons to live happily, hence enjoy your maturity in time. He's not here, rather gone to a best place ever but you're here and live up to your expectations, as thought. Someday all will be worthwhile to you.