A Rabbit Heart Beat

Love it, especially the line "Little did I know, I was used and then despaired", I really connected with that.

Friendship is one tricky union. Its an everyday, normal relationship that gets so twisted. One mostly ends up so deeply bonded with another not knowing that person isn't for real. So incompatible in character and priorities but because we're all different in our attitudes. We give benefit of doubts always that'll end up ripping our entire life apart. Very despairing and hurtful but that's the reality of it. Fortunately, if you meet a good person with a golden heart then your friendship will stay till eternity. Your disappointment is apparent and you wished it didn't turn out this way. You gave your best shot i assume but its obvious this wasn't a worthy friend. They say- 'once bitten, twice shy'. Good work.

I like this one. it reminds me of my bestfriend. she pretended to be my friend for her advantages and then when she didnt need me anymore she dismissed me and betrayed me . although im mad at her i'll never forget her. the words are true to your feelings :)

Wooooooooooow let me tell u THIS IS AN AWESOME POEM, AND I ADORE IT.

All I knew
you were a friend
Little did I know
I was used and then despaired

^^ A sad beginning, but still one that pulled me in and gave tone, voice, and direction to your piece.

You never came across
a Rabbit like me,
who is so much what you need
A Rabbit heart beat

^^ This stanza was the first to bring an idea of who you are to the piece and I really liked the unique way you did that. As well as the fact it was a quick description but precise.

Everything was figured out,
now you have sinned
and there's nothing left to share

^^ Sad but necessary for this piece. It isn't too descriptive but it is just vague enough to keep the audience interested.

No redemption, running and hiding
What was I about?
no notice of interest and
fun since we first met

^^ To the point but the way you worded this stanza was remarkable.

Never let a rabbit in a home
if it causes damage
evolving you to spend all your nights awake

^^ This is my favorite stanza. Somehow it just speaks to me. I love how it starts to wrap up this amazing piece and it does so in one of the smoothest ways.

. . .I wish you understood me,
but never will I forget you . . .

^^ Fantastic way to finish the end that you started. Simple but potent enough to get the message across.

I love the word choice in this piece and how it embodies you in such unusual ways. The flow was so easy to follow and there were no choppy places like I thought there would be (not that I mean that against you, just the way my friend talked about this piece I figured it would have some flaws.) As I mentioned before with your voice and the tone, I love how it added an extra spice to the piece.

5/5 and very original.

~MRK