When I am Broken

by Cardwell   May 23, 2012


When I am Broken
with all of life's scars
I look at my blood
Collected in Jars

I cut at myself
And save all the blood
To remind me of hell,
To be the person I should

When I am broken
and covered in shame
I like to take walks
out there in the rain

'Cause out in the rain,
And the thunder and lightning
nobody can tell
that you were just crying.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Cardwell, this is such an emotional piece. I enjoyed reading all of it, but the part that I enjoyed the most was the last stanza because it reminded me so much of myself. That is one of the reasons why I love the rain because of the privacy it gives you when you just want to cry from heartbreak. Very sad and emotional. Thank you for sharing this. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This was such a simple yet striking piece. I loved everything about it, the raw emotions and that feeling of total despair. Don't give up :)

    Beautiful poem- heartbreaking descriptions, especially the part about being in the rain, because it's true, few can tell when someone is crying.

    Keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by Silent Girl

    Very emotional poem i'm tearing up very touching i know how you feel very deep and sad poem i have a scar when i cut myself it never goes away once you cut the scar remains their forever i love the flow of this poem it's amazing and i like the title 5/5