Swaying Heart

by Lioness   May 28, 2012


Even my heart is
swaying against my
forbidden memories
and I feel trapped
within the walls of
my own mind,

where I can
never be set
free.

You see there's
this image.
This disturbing
picture which has
taken grasp
of my life and
released venom
deep within
my blooded
veins,

and it's where
everything began.

I was six.

Perhaps that's
why they
deny it ever
happened or
regret not trying
to fix me back then,

and believe me
when I say that
I was broken.

They ignored me
hoping it would
disappear, which
it did.

For them.

Maybe this time
I want to forget
too.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Outstanding! I really enjoyed reading this poem. I really felt for you in this piece and my heart goes out to you if this poem is based on a true story.

    "They ignored me
    hoping it would
    disappear, which
    it did.

    For them."

    ^

    My favorite part

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    I officially announce, that I hate sad poems, because they make me cry. But I love them cause they're true feeling, poured in a poem making it so special.

    Bad memories can be so harsh on us, specially those that happened when we ate kids, cause they'll always have an effect on us, even id we forgot them.
    Wish you the best<3
    An amazing poem, written by an amazing person:)

  • 6 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I came across this yesterday, and I still don't know what or how to comment..
    This just captures sadness and beauty perfectly. It is personal, not all of us go through what you do and not everyone would understand, but still, this is a relatable piece.

    'Even my heart is swaying against my forbidden memories and I feel trapped within the walls of my own mind, where I can never be set free.'
    ^'Swaying' connotes a gentle movement, something so involuntary. And when I come across that word, I imagine something gently moved/blown by a gentle breeze. But the way you penned that here was quite different and unique. It's as though it's fast-paced instead of 'gentle'.

    'You see there's this image.'
    ^With just five words, you managed to leave me breathless. It's like a warning, or a start of a story that gives suspense.

    'This disturbing picture which has taken grasp of my life and released venom deep within my blooded veins, and it's where
    everything began.'
    ^Heart-breaking :( One of the most depressing stanzas I've read in a while, but still, it is beautiful. Hm, should 'blooded' be 'bloodied'?

    'I was six.'
    ^Again, a little sentence. Yet heart-breaking and filled with emotion.

    'They ignored me hoping it would disappear, which it did.
    For them.
    Maybe this time
    I want to forget
    too.'
    ^The ending's certainly sad, yet there was a hint of hope within the last sentence.
    Overall, I love this piece for its powerful emotional impact though it was/is sad. The simple word choice complimented the sad tone. Great job. Keep writing :)
    -X

    --
    Also, I want to nominate this. But it's only Tuesday and I used two of my votes already! Awesome poems this week. If no one nominates this by Friday, I will :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I love the title. I can feel so much pain reading these words. :( I know all of us have things we want to forget that just keeps playing repeat on inside our head and heart forever.

  • 6 years ago

    by Karla

    Touching poem Liz.