Comments : Three Shades of Dark

  • 11 years ago

    by Mom Pike

    This is very pretty. This is a poem that I can relate to. Often times I sit and feel empty, and I just want my thoughts heard. I see you are the same way and I like that. Keep writing sweetheart, I love to hear your poems. This one touched my heart.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    An amazing piece! I feel the same way sometimes...this really hit hard for me... love it. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    The feeling of sadness and burden is so strong, it really stands out. Release your thoughts and pressure in your writing, I always do and it does help allot.

  • 11 years ago

    by Thomas

    Writing poems is making your emotions and thoughts visible/ materialized. After this you can feel empty because it is no longer just inside of you but it's still better than to let is fester. It gives your body a way to release some of that emotional stress.

    you visualized this very well in your poem.

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Feeling empty inside and nobody there
    to hear our cry, sadness becomes
    overwhelming, I know that feeling to well
    excellent written and very emotional

  • 11 years ago

    by Meme

    I have to say that this one of my favorites from you Liz.
    I got so many different emotions after each verse, OMG you are an artist.

    Every time my black
    words are penned
    against the white
    paper, I can feel
    each letter marking
    my skin,

    like a permanent tattoo
    of emotions.
    ^^
    Yes, true sincere words can have a huge impact on us. And you comparing them to a permanent tattoo is so deep. It shows that they become a permanent part of who you are; and just like real tattoos its not easy to erase them ..

    Each poem I write becomes
    a part of me like fallen limbs
    being attached by string,
    ready to break me without
    a moments warning.
    ^^
    honestly, the image in this verse just freaked me out as I always imagine what I read and when I imagined a fallen limb attached by a string I freaked iut, lol. But that shows how deep and hurt you must feel for yiu to come up with this image. Penned it!

    Even though I feel empty
    inside, my soul is heavy
    with such burden it is
    difficult to leave these
    emotions behind.
    ^^
    what I love is the contradiction in this verse. Feeling empty but yet this burden is occupying all there is in you. Best way to paint a picture of emptiness vs burdens.

    So I'm left with a shadow
    following my footprints
    leaving my mark on the
    ground for all to feel.

    Three shades of dark have
    become me.
    ^^
    then comes my favorite part in this poem. The title said it first, now I got a sense of what you meant by it. Never have I imagined that sadness could be described in such powerful words "Three shades of dark" thats all you have to say and I already get the sadness you feel ..

    A nomination in my book, and will have a lot of visits to this piece.

    xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Amazing! You summed up so well what it feels like to be writer and suffer from depression and lifes burdens. I like how you drew me in and kept my attention throughout the poem.

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Okay, I have to say Liz...You just create true masterpieces and every time I read a poem of yours it feels so real and honest and that is a true art...to be able to put a piece of you onto the page with such skill.

    I must express that the sadness in here was evident and I'd like to say that you are an amazing woman and you bring light to my life, sprinkle some in yours...you deserve it girl.

    Love you millions
    xxxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Every time my black
    words are penned
    against the white
    paper, I can feel
    each letter marking
    my skin,

    like a permanent tattoo
    of emotions.

    -- I understood that when you write each of your poems, is as if you are writing on your skin while feeling the pain when you are writing them, and they remain in their like a permanent tattoo.

    Each poem I write becomes
    a part of me like fallen limbs
    being attached by string,
    ready to break me without
    a moments warning.

    ---and every time, you read one of your poems, the sadness and pain comes back.

    Even though I feel empty
    inside, my soul is heavy
    with such burden it is
    difficult to leave these
    emotions behind.

    ---even though, you have release those emotions in each of your poems, the emotions still linger in your soul. It's difficult to get rid of them despite putting them in a "piece of paper."

    So I'm left with a shadow
    following my footprints
    leaving my mark on the
    ground for all to feel.

    -- and when you write your poems, your left with a shadow of your emotions that were supposed to remain within the poem but instead is following you and everyone can feel it. Not just those who read the pieces.

    Three shades of dark have
    become me.

    -- and I'm trying to understand the title.. but it's beyond me.. though, I do feel the sadness in those words.