Comments : Goodnight

  • 11 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Im not giing to say much other than although sad, this was heartstoppingly epic, loved it love you syrup x

  • 11 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    I knew this was yours, Im really glad it won:)
    Great Job Andrea:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Brought me to tears Andrea, your words always touch my soul...
    with love always,
    xxx

    Just such strong, emotional poetry.
    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    Great one, Adnrea!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Read with a lump in my throat, to be so touched in one's life by another and to have a true soulmate is such a beautiful thing.

    Having to bear the seperation is such a hardship. This write truly is a tear jerker.

  • 11 years ago

    by Phase

    Heart.Breaking!!! Oh my gosh, what a tragic poem, full of despair - yet it's written gracefully and the imagery is perfection! I think this is great, Maple - I really do!

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    Wow,

    Sad but oh my beautiful.

    Shows the complete love between you both.

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Andrea,

    My heart breaks everytime I read a piece from you about that matter. I know how much love you hold deep in your heart and I know how heart-wrenching it feels to lose someone you love and cherish. But I do advise you to stick to your previous pieces that have hope, faith and patience because relief suits you the best. I want to tell you to hang in there but I know how sad and difficult it is and I cannot even imagine your situation or walk a mile in your shoes. It's just too much.

    I have always loved your work, the simple touch of it. :)

    'You and I always sleep together as one,
    so when it's time for you to rest eternally,
    please call me to slumber my Love-'

    This part just makes me want to jump at you and hug you sooo tight. How tender and melancholic! I hope this won't happen and he will stay with you till the end. You are such a beautiful pair and I hate to read this... I have a minor thing regarding the poem, though I didn't intend to talk about poetry in my comment but, I have to tell you that 'to count' in the next stanza isn't needed. 'Too many times' is just enough and serve the meaning. Just a suggestion. :)

    Just lovely and...sad. :(

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ugn andrea this write...I just don't know how you can write so beautifull on a topic that is so heart breaking. You do it every time and I just find your heart more beautiful than your poetry just because you can do that!!

    Love this and love youuuuu

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    Words fail me wenever I read you because they runaway from me. Wish I could hug you and whisper:"it's going to be alright sista".
    Brightest Blessings.

  • 11 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    These sleepy eyes have looked out windows
    far too many times and without you,
    Id rather turn out the lights, close the drapes,

    and say goodnight, forever and always....

    could there be more union ?

  • 11 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Typos: In the first stanza, 'Window's' is supposed to be 'Windows' because there is nothing that is in possession there, and if you add 'is' it doesn't quite make sense. Fifth stanza, last line, 'Id' is supposed to be 'I'd' because it is a contraction. I also think that in the second stanza, last line, 'windows' is supposed to be 'window's' because you are talking about the view that belongs to the window - I think. I am not sure however on that one :( I am just trying to help...

    Andrea, I am sorry that I haven't commented on this until now. I seem to be slacking lately :/ I am sorry.

    This seems to be another one of those extreme, emotional pieces. I recently discovered what is behind most of these poems, and you don't know how sorry I am. I am a newbie, so I didn't quite catch on until now. I don't know what to say about that, only that I am sorry, and that I wish that it wasn't you going through this, or your husband. You don't deserve that, but sometimes life is cruel.

    'You and I always sleep together as one,
    so when it's time for you to rest eternally,
    please call me to slumber my Love-'

    ^ This poem brought me to tears, and that rarely ever happens. The part that I loved the most is this one because it is so jammed pack with emotion. This whole poem is, but to me this one has the most. It shows me that you love this person unconditionally. Very beautiful.

    Excellent/raw/heartbreaking
    5/5