I have to agree with amy, the first part had problems with flow. Try reading it outloud. Other then that it was great, a lot of passion. I liked the last line best. I'm gonna give this a 5/5 as its your first poem on here. :)
Amazing and inspiring poem! so positive. I loved that about it.(:
3 years ago
I love this write and a lot of your poems in general. They are very very light and easy to read. Refreshing for this site, its a shame you dont have more and I love poems and poetry!
This is a sweet poem :3
The stanzas come easy,
and free, meaningfully.
The smiles are sweet,
and wide, as eyes with words greet.
and shine as beating is swift.
^ This stanza is beautiful. The message is wonderful. This shows the life of someone who takes the day to the step of her own beat... at her pace... Loving it as she goes no matter what always finding the good in it. More people should have this approach!!
Hope begins, energy flows, spirit returns.
The standalone line is good by itself, it hits all the core elements and i love how you hit hope. I think poets have so much hope in whatever they enjoy writing. Some love, others sorrow, and even more in the things between... It just shows that writing can re-energize you.
Inspiration we can grow,
and flourish we must know.
Divine inside glowing,
warm and flowing.
Tossing the seeds,
and pulling the weeds.
Haha. I love how you mention pulling the weeds, along with everything else. Your obviously showing a lot of love and care to your poems. Its something you thought about and took your time into and i think when you wrote this it uplifted you. It made you feel better as you tossed your seeds and planted your poem, tending to the writing as it grew and grew till it flourished into something even more amazing then you thought. I LOVE THAT LINE.
Joy bubbles, laughter sings, toes curl.
And. I. Am. Alive!
THose two lines. Just shows how light hearted you are.
More people like you need to be in this world. So sweet and lovely
Alright this poem made me laugh in some parts I'm not going to lie because in those it showed the youthful part of being a beginner where you haven't yet become jaded (some do become jaded) as poets have been writting for a long while. I wasn't really a big fan of those rhymes (yes I know that's ironic because I sometimes use rhymes on my poetry) it's not that I don't love the poem because I do but like I was once told it restricts what you can do without them. The title was fantastic honey, you got the life of a poet down to the end of the poem. Loved that it's relatable and it's just too adorable! 4/5