This rhyming piece really made me smile. The author of this piece has captivated us with her strong and secure comfort within her own vanity... It was a delightful piece and a joy to read... the flow was very pretty....
"With waistline that's not shallow
nor my personality
there's gratitude for how
the way things appear on me"
This stanza is so powerful.... She talks about the strengths of inner and outer strength here... adore this stanza!
This piece deserves to be highlighted ....very inspirational piece.. well done Dixiedaisy
This piece is definitely inspirational. I love the fact you were so honest and open. It's something wonderful to see in poetry.
At first when I opened this up I was surprised at the lack of punctuation. I know it's how you usually write however generally you have at least a full stop at the end. It made me wonder if you left it out due to the topic of imperfections? Probably a far-fetched assumption and maybe I notice things a little too much (crazy person much? haha) but that was just something I picked up on. Either way punctuation or lack of really doesn't bother me.
"Stretch marks worn as medals"
^I really liked this, you know most people relate stretch marks to giving birth and here it fits really well into it. You fought a battle to have your children, a beautiful one but your medal is having those children in your life. While most people relate stretch marks to giving birth they're also evident on most women I've ever seen, weight loss and gain and just growing older in general cause them so I feel as though everyone could find a way to relate to this.
I just noticed you have rhyme, I didn't even pick up on it in the first stanza.
I'm really quite fond of how you mention no surgery has been bought, that's so you, Kay. You are a naturally beautiful person inside and out.
"Widened feet below
on firm foundations keep
sagging breast are pillows
to rock little ones to sleep"
^This was beautiful and my absolute favorite part. It reminds me of being a child so much. So many little memories flashed back to me.
When I first read this I wanted this to be a winner, in a contest, on the front page, just a winner in general...
I absolutely loved the way you worded "im not perfect"...it describes how beautiful life is and how we become molded into an imperfect human because of lifes circumstances, but thats exactly whats supposed to happen, and exactly why this poem is amazing.
I loved it, I've read it at least 6 times, its definitely a favorite of mine.