Exceeding the Script

by nouriguess   Jul 7, 2012


If you remember the sycamore
shadow where we swept
the fire that caught love
and our midnight-shaped fates, you'll
know why it was all lit up there
in my chest, darling.
Why I've always named you
a dead comet; a beautiful memory
in my locket
and why it felt never enough for me
to sleep with words so that you
might drop
in.

I think you remember the breeze of
our last November when all
I saw between the lines of that novelette
upon your lips was a shivering missive
speaking of light,
agony
and old photos.
I think you didn't wonder too long to
realise that I left you for you
and left me for you
and left us for the sake of
a beautiful closing stanza.

Our poetry was never epic
and nature couldn't describe its pleats
above us; rain was the widow of the morning
coffee cups and storms
found themselves away from your kiss.
Still, I really needed
a beautiful ending
perpetuating each secret you've printed
once
upon my skin.

I wrote you in oblivion
but never mind, you never succumb
to the flow.

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  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Go away kid

  • 11 years ago

    by Aram S Hatem

    I like this poem

  • 11 years ago

    by The Prince

    Beautifully nostalgic and poignant. I don't have a critique.

    I don't like the title actually.

    Loved the ending. I'd nominate it but I don't want anyone to think I'm biased, but your poems are getting better. Keep writing and acting insane and writing weird haikus and you'll be a star.

    • 11 years ago

      by nouriguess

      Don't worry about the crazy and weird part!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    You always manage to start and end a poem awesomely don't you.

    I love the first two lines, I love how you have used the word sycamore (a tree) without using the word tree, and then you said shadow. It makes me think of sitting underneath the tree with its shadow hiding away from the sunshine. If I had not known what a sycamore was I probably would have looked it up.

    I can really feel the sadness come through in the words and I love the images you have used here. The last three lines were also brilliant!!! I believe in the end how you saw him is how he saw himself, as nothing.

    Oh awesome, awesome!

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    First, your title is not catchy at all.
    Second, I love how abstract you can get. I may not understand everything, duh, but you have I don't know what to say... you have.. IT.

    Thumbs Up

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