W O O O W !!

Noura, what the hell was that girl?! I am totally speechless .. Omg, you and your breathtaking metaphors .. I love it an I love you :-)

And this part, exactly this part I fell in love with ..

I think you didn't wonder too long to
realise that I left you for you
and left me for you
and left us for the sake of
a beautiful closing stanza.

Perfectooooo :-))))

Double post!!

First, your title is not catchy at all.
Second, I love how abstract you can get. I may not understand everything, duh, but you have I don't know what to say... you have.. IT.

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You always manage to start and end a poem awesomely don't you.

I love the first two lines, I love how you have used the word sycamore (a tree) without using the word tree, and then you said shadow. It makes me think of sitting underneath the tree with its shadow hiding away from the sunshine. If I had not known what a sycamore was I probably would have looked it up.

I can really feel the sadness come through in the words and I love the images you have used here. The last three lines were also brilliant!!! I believe in the end how you saw him is how he saw himself, as nothing.

Oh awesome, awesome!

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Beautifully nostalgic and poignant. I don't have a critique.

I don't like the title actually.

Loved the ending. I'd nominate it but I don't want anyone to think I'm biased, but your poems are getting better. Keep writing and acting insane and writing weird haikus and you'll be a star.

I like this poem

Go away kid