There's a lot of potential in this poem, I just think parts of it could be re-read and worked on, but that's just my opinion. Here are some suggestions:

"Smoking half a pack at once, still stressed
Kick this shit, aint got a penny in my pocket
Mind's a tangled up mess,
only gets worse with this stress
The world's pushing me down,
life is making me drown
Tryin every day to get rid of this frown"

I like the way you opened this poem up to this image of not knowing what to do or where to go, not having any money or any money to spare at the least, and smoking that pack of cigarettes- not knowing how to get back up.

My suggestion here is to reformat the structure. Unless your next line is the beginning of a new sentence, I would say don't capitalize the first letter Also, punctuation needs to be after "drown"- maybe a comma?

"The only things that make me happy,
Make me worry all the more
Knowing that its okay today
But tomorrow may reopen sores"

Break into a separate stanza here. I think it would still connect your ideas well but you don't need your whole poem to just be lumped together. Here would be a good place to have this stand out. "its" should have an apostrophe. However, I loved the thought you put into this, the things that make you happy still make you frustrated, fearful even. You put this part so well "may reopen sores"- what do we have hidden? what do we try to place at the bottom of our heart but is still hurting? I think a bit expansion as to specific feelings or imagery would be helpful here...giving the reader more to feel....more to ponder about. How does your heart feel? What do you think when you pass others, do you wish to be them? Where are you at? Just some sensory images to strengthen.

"Constantly living with regrets, making a mess
Gotta figure out just what to do"

I thought this line was a bit weak.....the "constantly living with regrets" was really powerful, but then you just added "making a mess", and it's a lot more than that. Explain it. Sometimes I feel like it's chaos but that I'm the only one noticing it, making it from the background.

"Don't know who to trust, but it's a must
Test the waters even when they're new
Cant be scared, gotta be prepared
To grab this life by the throat
Im so damn tired of this cloud of grey
Gotta beat it before it makes me choke:

Don't forget your apostrophes.

What I loved most was some surprising phrases that touched my heart and made me see this strong woman rising above. "Test the waters even when they're new"- what a life lesson! We sometimes do have to ahead and try new things, live in new situations, but learn from that....become a better person because of it perhaps. You expressed yourself so well in this poem, it was definitely dismal near the end, where I got that feeling of total exhaustion and a lot of doubt. But you got to know there's sunshine, there's more than a cloud of grey. There's always some confusion still left, but you must not give up hope, that realization that there is a way :]

Good poem with potential but I think it could blossom to a lot more if you work on flow, and adding more, that's just in my eyes, but I think you could give a unique way you feel that really opens the reader's eyes as to what it is. I think the title could be worked on too, the ending is more strong than the other parts of the poem, even the opening...and it feels like a lot more depth than just "overwhelmed". Play off testing the waters, throw that inspiration out.

"Learning to Stand" "Rise Above" things like that perhaps?
Thanks for the reader, keep writing! Take care.

This is good I agree with the comment below though I feel it could have been more but I liked the emotion here.

"overwhelmed" ... This title is very appropriate as the main feeling that stands out from the writing is the overwhelming of all the emotions and thoughts.
- nice and short and also eye catching.

Smoking half a pack at once, still stressed
Kick this shit, aint got a penny in my pocket

- I liked this opening because of the beat that you pick up reading it, it gives it the flow of a rap song, for me anyway. And it lets me know the flow of the poem and how to read on.

- I also like them because it shows the level of stress by the fact smoking is not even touching the sides of it and is only leaving you more penniless.

The world's pushing me down,
life is making me drown
Tryin every day to get rid of this frown

- In these lines you get a real sense of the heavy depression in which you are writing about. When you feel the whole world on your shoulders and like everyone is against you. And nothing you can do can take that frown away.

The only things that make me happy,
Make me worry all the more

- I could relate to these lines, however they did make me curious as to what things you enjoyed that make you worry? Is it family, friends? What is it about it that makes you worry?

Knowing that its okay today
But tomorrow may reopen sores

- This is a perfect example of what it like to live with depression, having a good day but at the same time worrying what kind of day tomorrow will bring!

Don't know who to trust, but it's a must
Test the waters even when they're new

- these were my favourite 2 lines of your poem. Your first line speaks volumes of truth, we are all scared to trust people but yet we have to. The testing the waters line is so powerful and it stands out really well. For me it relates to the beginning of the trust you have for someone. You dont know what is it like to trust them, if they will keep your trust or let you down, all of this is unknown but yet you have to test it. Greatly penned.

Im so damn tired of this cloud of grey
Gotta beat it before it makes me choke

- Your ending was good because in one way it shows the hopelessness that you feel, being drained from the stress and the depression. In another way, your last line over powers that doubt to make a statement that you will not give up and let it win. This, for me, is a great ending, one of strength and power!

Well done.

Thank you all so much for the comments! I edited it and added some more detail like you said, so please let me know what you think about it now! Thanks all!

I love this poem, really relating to it at this point in my life. It seems well put together and most definitely conveys the emotion of bring overwhelmed. I'm not gonna disect the piece however, as i feel that once you start doing that a lot of the rawness that i find so captivating is lost. Wonderful job tho. 5/5

When mind is made up, win is close. Quitting fear, is winning the fight. Every good attempt, restores joy. Until you give up, you can win.

Great, alot of emotions, stress. I felt the pain. loved it

This had a really great pace that you held onto throughout the poem.
It flowed smoothly and you have used rhyme well.

I can't pick a favourite stanza, which is unusual for me, but they're all just really great! Each tends to throw more emotion into the mix. Your title was definitely well chosen.

To some aspects of the poem, I can relate.
But I think that this piece overall, is very relatable to many readers. A plus in my eyes.

Think I will be reading more from you. (:

Well penned. 5/5

The last two lines were my favorite. The poem was very expressive, overall. Thank you floor sharing.

The poem indeed is awesome... so relating at few places and u have brought a real picture in front of ppl who strive for normalcy on a daily basis even aftr bein stabbed wit cruelcy agn and agn... Great flow as well.. wonderful..!!!!

This is awesome, this should be the anthem to quitting something. Nicely done. So much power and emotion. It really drew me in from the very first sentence.
5/5

Another great piece. My favorite part were the two lines in the last stanza "To grab this life by the throat" and "gotta beat it before it makes me choke" the imagery behind them is very strong.

Keep writing, I really enjoy your work!