This is perfect. |
by Tara Kay
^^ I agree... |
by Britt
It's absolutely not too ugly to be a poem, it's one of the most raw and honest poems I've felt in a while. This is incredible. |
Noura, this was really touching....it was so raw and open and I thought this was a brilliant poem. Definitely not too ugly or too this or that to be a poem, you made this your own, weaving so many thoughts and memories. It was incredible to read this and think about your father....how much you think of April, remember, calling to be heard. So much emotion here and absolute soul in this poem. Thanks for sharing... |
by Decayed
I agree. |
by L
This is perfect just as the Cinderella poem. |
by nouriguess
Guys, thank you, I'm tearing up! It's really uplifting to see people not being judgemental even when it's their right. This poem is nowhere good and it has no imagery. Merely a rant. But thanks for understanding that emotions are precious too. Really, the first time I get emotional over comments. Thank you all. |
by The Prince
I'm coming back to this. WAIT |
by The Prince
Sometimes we reach into ourselves when we're not 'trying' to write, and we let the words out of their cages and something like this happens. We have vomited onto a page, but it's glorious because most of the time we sit and carefully plan out every word so it fits our well constructed images in our head. This is different. This is raw, and it's powerful because of that. I will critique poems that have been written with a craft behind it, but there's no deliberate craft here, it's just pent up emotion. I enjoyed it, even though i was saddned by it. It could be one of your best or one of your worst depending how you look at it. But I for one, won't tear this limb from limb and analyse it because I know these poems, I know these thought processes and I know you so I'm just going to congratulate you for letting your emotions fly out and smack the reader around a bit :P |
by Wild flower
This poem is heartfelt, I dunno why it made ne shiver. |
by Lioness
I felt like crying while reading this poem. It really shows one's heartache when they lose someone close to them. I love what you have written saying that your memories are dangling off your eyes (a beautiful and poetic way of describing your tears). |
by Xanthe
Noura.. don't call this ugly. It is one of your best poems, in my opinion. I'm glad you feel better after submitting this. Hope all's well now :) |