Nicely peened haiku Hannah! Did you write it in the form of 7/9/6 or 7/9/5?

As syrup would say WHOOOOT!!!! Im a big fan of haiku's and i really loved this you got so much imagery from so few lines :-))

Great job 5/5!!

I really like this Haiku :) and I love poems about how meaningful kisses can be, especially since I think everybody tries and convey it in a different way, speaking from their own experiences and that gives us the possability to have a variety of poems concerning this subject. Quite enjoyed yours :)

Your first attempt is WOOOW!

Beautiful.

:O Oh that must have been one powerful kiss that your heart stopped and you needed a defibrillator.

This is so awesome. I loved it!!!

x

Your fist attempt was much better than my first attempt.. and it was soo lovely and I absoultey love the idea of it as well, the power of a kiss, I love it, it really does spark doesn't........it makes me want to kiss someone :P hehe

excellent haiku!

I thought this was a lovely piece, made me smile :)

Haha sorry I was just reading the comment too short and unrealistic ... Obviously someone needs to google haiku .... I love criticism but that sounded really blunt and didn't explain the reasons for the. Strong statement ... But Yess a really good attempt I personally don't like using words like gainest and but nothing major really good images :)

Haha sorry I was just reading the comment too short and unrealistic ... Obviously someone needs to google haiku .... I love criticism but that sounded really blunt and didn't explain the reasons for the. Strong statement ... But Yess a really good attempt I personally don't like using words like gainest and but nothing major really good images :)

For your first try you've done a wonderful job with this little piece.
You've explained a kiss with deep imagery.
An enjoyable read.

Personally, I am not a big fan of the Haiku. But you have created a piece filled with imagery and passion.
Nice work, especially for a first attempt!