Comments : Yesterday

  • 5 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    :( Exactly...I was happy.
    Damn it these tears, just that is it.

    you make me feel sooo weak yet so understood though I hope all is okay with you.

    xx

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Hey Liz,

    Whoever that person is, who judges you and think you're a miserable soul, can...ok no cursing here, I just disagree with them. They know nothing about you.

    'so much that I lost
    my way and fell between
    the broken cracks.'

    See this bit here? See it? It is what made me fall for you now even more.

    Be strong and chin up, they all are losers anyway. (;

  • 5 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh, I really like this one. One of my favourites that I have read of yours and I felt a lot of relation to it.

    You're nestled between
    my dusty pages and
    numbing words that
    keep my heart feeling
    empty inside.

    - excellent use of power words drawing attention to the emotions which you feel. I like the use of dusty pages, implying that the book has been over looked for many years gathering dust.

    You want to read me
    like a book yet you
    turn the pages vigorously
    without hearing my story.

    - this reminds me of the saying " don't judge a book by it's cover". This is sadly true about what humans do to others instead of taking the time to read the whole story they just want to jump to the end don't they??

    Skipping chapters, jumping
    to the end not realising
    that the road I took
    was vacant and rutted
    beneath my feet,

    - I like how you express yourself here and paint the imagery of this road you have been on which sounds so troubled and lonely. Like you were desperatly seeking someone to walk it with you and no one came. And now in this poem you are asking people to acknowledge this road and not look past it. ~Great

    so much that I lost
    my way and fell between
    the broken cracks.

    - really good description of how you truly feel. Like saying you hit rock bottom and no one prevented this.

    Instead...

    you chose to judge me
    for who you believe I am today
    without knowing who I was yesterday.

    - my favourite part of the poem. These words just ring out to me and it is also a good quote on it's own. I think this is someonething so powerful that a lot of people would imagine saying to others. Part of a true friend is not only accepting your past but understanding it and not judging you because of it. You also learn your true friends by the people you describe in your poem. The people who deny you have a past because they do not want the backage of going there and finding out the truth, they would rather paint you as what they see and simply nothing more.

    and yesterday I thought I
    was happy.

    - such a sad ending, the idea between debating whither you were truly happy or just fooled into feeling the happiness. Looking back, the happiness doesnt seem so much after all.

    Such a sad poem but a really good idea and I would love to share this with all the " chapter skippers" in the world!

    5/5 xxx

  • 5 years ago

    by Meme

    Its the way you wrap the reader aound your words, left weak .. powerless .. and with a deep Sigh!

    I just have no words to describe this Liz, no more words ...

    Epic as always .. Nominated once my votes are back
    xxx

  • 5 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Oh, Liz. I really don't know what to say about this at all. Every time I read this, it brings tears to my eyes because I have felt the same way so many times. This is a masterpiece of yours, in my opinion. Oh my...

    'You're nestled between
    my dusty pages and
    numbing words that
    keep my heart feeling
    empty inside.'

    ^ As I read this poem, it is almost like this person is a memory. Being 'nestled between' something and the word 'dusty' makes me think that the person is not often thought about, and when he is it brings heartbreak once more. I could tell from this stanza that you were not very pleased with this person, and that you really did not want anything to do with them.

    'You want to read me
    like a book yet you
    turn the pages vigorously
    without hearing my story.'

    ^ The word 'vigorously' is a very strong one. I assume that this person jumped to conclusions, before considering the story on both sides? The next stanza confirms this thought. I like the way that you keep on retaining the book characteristics - it is one of my favorite things here, because it is relatable to us all. We know what books are, so the imagery is perfect.

    There are a lot of things that I like about this. Whatever people say, if they in fact do say something about it, I don't want you to change it. I don't know why I am saying this, but for some reason I just have the urge to.

    I guess the reason that this is so important to me is because I feel this way every day. Even though it is sad, I am glad that I am not the only one feeling like this. Kind of like a comrade in arms, I suppose. I am sorry that a person did this to you. It doesn't feel good does it? It makes me feel like the person betrayed me sometimes, especially when they are so close to you.

    You expressed this most elegantly, Liz. I am going to nominate this. Extremely beautiful.

    Excellent/beautiful/powerful
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    So much emotion coming from the heart.
    I see lots of pain and frustration in this piece
    peope are who they are, they will and continue on judging others, pure ignorance
    Important is you know who you are.
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    I feel deeply attached to this, Liz...

    I, too, sometimes skip pages to reach the end (I wonder why we do it), haha it seems to me that it's a natural deed in every human, and it is reflected here not literally, but in the human character sense.

    Beautiful analogy!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Maybe I dunno you, but after reading this poem, and the commentts, I can tell that you have a beautiful heart. See I'm sure I judged you right.

    Whoever the person who judged you wrong , I hope she/he realize that. I can realtate to this. Touching piece, great job.

  • 5 years ago

    by The Prince

    This is very sad, touching and poignant. Normally, there'd be a lot in here I would critique, but no, this is written in such a saddened and confessional way, I can't bring myself to.

    'Instead...

    you chose to judge me
    for who you believe I am today
    without knowing who I was yesterday.'

    How many of us can relate to that? How many people feel completely discarded at one point in their lives, thinking they know happiness and finally, they try to grapple on to it, but that one person is able to give and take it so so easily.

    I got a huge lump in my throat reading this.

    'You want to read me
    like a book yet you
    turn the pages vigorously
    without hearing my story.'

    So simple, yet so powerful. I love the paralleling of the common 'read me like a book' phrase, and the sadness that follows.

    I enjoyed this write from you. It's very pure, and unedited. A lot of people can't pull this off, but sometimes emotions can give us a way with words we never knew we had.

    Keep writing, dear. And keep smiling!

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    Oh Liz,

    I do think that the past is to be left in the past, but that only apply to us.
    I mean, it applies for one person, so that there won't be any more struggles and that we could heal if the past is painful.

    But when it comes to other people, we have to open up.
    I mean to friends or mainly to a lover and so we have to bring the past up and share it like a book. One that hopefully, we have analyzed and completely understood. So if that someone can't understand it, we can explain the parts that seems vague. And also that whenever we read our book, we won't get hurt ( the healing part comes in). Though, I do agree that there are some parts of the books that no matter how many times we read them, they still get to us.

    And indeed, if we want someone to understand us, they have to read our book and not just scan through it. If they read it, it means they are interested to know everything about that subject, and they will not judge but will ask questions to understand it when they get stuck.

    This part right here,

    you chose to judge me
    for who you believe I am today
    without knowing who I was yesterday.

    and yesterday I thought I
    was happy

    Is a bit confusing to me, In a way, I thought it was a bit sarcastic because
    it says "and yesterday I thought I was happy" as if you are no longer sure if you were. Perhaps, you are happier at the moment? but you don't seem to be because that someone is judging you.. .
    So the only part that adds to me the sarcastic part is the "I thought"

    but if I think about it for too long, then I guess you want to say that only yesterday you were happy but not in the present.

    I'm not quiet sure, sorry.

    But I do feel the sadness in this piece.

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    You want to read me like a book yet you turn the pages vigorously without hearing my story.

    ^^ dang! Award winning stanza

    Liz I loved this, great way of saying don't judge a book by its cover, and comparing yourself to the book :) as much as this was sad, I loved this! Your wording and creativeness always captivates me :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I didn't know I haven't commented on this til now :o
    I have nothing to say, really. But this is beautiful, Liz. I just want to say that. Whenever I read this, it saddens me. And I can easily relate to this.

    "Instead...
    youchose to judge me
    for who you believe I am today
    without knowing who I was yesterday.
    and yesterday I thought I
    was happy."
    ^
    The ending's just breathtaking, and perfectly penned. Please, keep writing

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    What a killer. This is a very sad piece, perhaps a poem that is written from the bottom of the heart, or from the bottom of the..heart..

    Many people will be relating to this, but everyone aches with his own special ways, I love how you chose to draw certain images, and leave a specific kinds of impacts over the reads by showing, not telling.

    Such as saying:

    You're nestled between
    my dusty pages and
    numbing words

    ^
    you could see that in your head, then start thinking and relating dust...and numbing words with their symbols to find how sad, you are feeling and how sad, this is going to be.

    second stanza:
    You want to read me
    like a book yet you
    turn the pages vigorously
    without hearing my story.

    ^ damn, how true. your honest in this piece makes it very personal to both yourself and the reader, this part is just, unexplainable, although it is simple and clear.
    Because when someone treats us that way, they tend to be very unfair with us, oblivious of what we have went through, and of what made us what we are today.

    in this stanza:

    so much that I lost
    my way and fell between
    the broken cracks.
    ^
    you sound like you are innneed of this person, so helpless and lost...as if you are longing but you dont even know it, because what made you feel that way..other wise ?
    Yet on a side note! as if this person gave you a shock. did not fullfill what you hoped he might.

    without knowing who I was yesterday.

    and yesterday I thought I
    was happy.

    ^^
    HOLLY COW...you just made me saw OHHH with a loud voice, this was just...I dont know, it got to me, really really got to me!

    perfect...i love you.
    added to my favs...hats off