Dysfunctional

Nice poem, excellent use of metaphors here all of which worked very well to create images in my head very strongly. Great layout for each stanza too, making those little scenes of description stand out on their own.

* far away can just be faraway because you are using it as an adjective here.

5/5

Outstanding writing in my book!

Lovely,
You know why,

to hold the bounty
to know the trick
put flesh upon the rage

an answer at last
has come to page.

I'm thinking of " Sometime", those old
lyrics of Bill Anderson and Mary Lou Turner;
written by Felice Mancini and Henry
Nicola Mancini

Clever use of words in this,the bones to cage, and tongue shaped like a question mark were my favourites, i love the whole frustration in this piece. Great write.