I love the fast pace of this and the fantastic images that you create. My only suggestion would be to ditch the very first line, i think an immediate echo doesn't fit in with the rest of the poem, you wont lose any quality for doing so. Just a suggestion, it is your poem. Thanks

Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Once again, your imagery is just flawless!

All I can say is: Brilliant!

5/5

Wow, I love this piece. The style is amazing. The voice is clear and very wonderfully draped throughout your piece. The descriptions are phenomenal and the theme of the piece is so clear. Excellent, wonderful, magnificent.

I can picture this poem in my head very good